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LyricFetish
Senior Member

since 2000-01-13

Posts 528
North Carolina

0 posted 2000-07-04 01:29 PM

Rotting petals now surround
This rose of love I thought I'd found
A sea of thorns with blackend face
And nothing but an empty vase

My heart now bleeding on this day
Watching ashes blow away
And in their place a crater lies
Because he said 'Love never dies'

I am none but the angel
Who sings you to sleep
As you pray to God
Your soul to keep
*Me

Jose Marti
Member

since 2000-07-01

Posts 374
washing DC

1 posted 2000-07-04 03:44 PM

I'm amazed. Very beautiful poem. The heart is a fragile thing. Never wear it on your sleeve, it gets broken to easily. He was right, love never dies. Wait until the next man who cares for you comes along and says that he loves you, and you'll see what I mean.

Kit McCallum

Administrator

Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

2 posted 2000-07-04 03:57 PM

Oh this flows so beautifully LyricFetish! Incredible imagery ... you've said so much in so few words ... wonderful!!!

Best wishes,
/Kit

StarPryncess17
Senior Member

since 2000-05-31

Posts 932
Colorado

3 posted 2000-07-04 04:42 PM

This is among my most favorites!! You have captured the essence very well! Keep it up my friend. Time in it's own essence can heal even the deepest of wounds--including the heart! Keep your head up friend! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~

~*~Love is the product of our dicontentment with ourselves~*~
~*~SMILE! It makes your butt shine!~*~

Erin
Member Elite

since 2000-06-15

Posts 2527
~Chicago~

4 posted 2000-07-04 05:09 PM

this is one of the best poems that i have read yet...its short, simple and straight to the point...you have my vote...its hard to let go of someone you love...but thats also another consequence of life and love...

~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~

AndrewDL
Junior Member

since 2000-07-02

Posts 24
California

5 posted 2000-07-05 01:53 AM

This poem has so much depth. A highly enjoyable read. The vase metaphor was lovely. Great work, keep it up.

-Andrew
Trust too much, and you may be deceived, but trust too little and you will live in torment forever.

LyricFetish
Senior Member

since 2000-01-13

Posts 528
North Carolina

6 posted 2000-07-05 02:19 PM

Thank you all so much for responding, actually I wrote this after I broke up with my boyfriend of 8 months about a year ago. It was a difficult time for me, but at least I got a poem out of it! Always looking on the bright side......peace guys!

*~Meredith~*

I am none but the angel
Who sings you to sleep
As you pray to God
Your soul to keep
*Me

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

7 posted 2007-12-01 08:04 PM

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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