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Without your love |
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Zombie Man Member
since 1999-06-22
Posts 52Va |
Yesterday when I was looking for you. You were nowhere to be found. It felt like my world just stopped. I didn't know what to do without you by my side. My life turned to a great pain. While my soul just walks around in the darkness. I didn't think I could live my life without your love. Could I go on alone? But like everything else, I learned to move on without you. People assumed I was fine by myself. Inside I was crying hoping you would come back. But you don't seem to care. I loved you with all my heart, And I didn't realize I would miss you so much. Now I notice without you I'm nothing. So now you are gone. And I'm all alone sitting in a dark room crying for u to come back to me. So we could be together... Forever...... |
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buttercup411 Junior Member
since 2000-07-03
Posts 41miami, fl, u.s |
that's just how i felt about my ex.. that's a really pretty poem.... i really like it at the end when you put that "forever" is a nice touch. : ) |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
great read. enjoyed it much and i hope to see more from you real soon. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Excellent expression Zombie Man! You've written with such heartfelt emotion ... time will heal your heart, and until then, keep writing ... great poem! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
i felt that way about my ex-boyfriend/close friend...one day he was here in my life...the it was like magic...he was gone...ive gotten over him...and found someone new...and thats what you should really do... ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
well, the love of my life continues to take my love for him and use it to his advantage, but I don't care because I love him. So I find myself crying myself to sleep knowing what I need to do but knowing that I don't have the strength to. Anyways, enough about me, loved this poem! Simply wonderful! Keep it up my friend! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~ ~*~My fire is dead,it knew no pain; yet it is dead and I remain: All stiff with ice ashes lie;and they are dead, and I will die~*~ ~*~SMILE! It makes |
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AndrewDL Junior Member
since 2000-07-02
Posts 24California |
full of emotion, a very enjoyable poem. keep writing. -Andrew Trust too much, and you may be deceived, but trust too little and you will live in torment forever. |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
Well man...it takes two to tango and when one person gets tired, the other is left standing alone...wanting to dance. There is no mystery to heartbreak and loss. The only mystery is what to do until someone else wants to dance. Jeremy "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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