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The Dance |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA 
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*i dont really know what this is, well i do..but its hard to explain. I'm a dancer, and i guess this is what i feel everytime i perform..enjoy  ~**The Dance**~ The music fills the air my breath begins to quickin My count is coming up a rush of nervousness runs through me Here I go..5,6,7,8 Hundreds in the crowd Lights shining brightly in my eyes Dancing from my soul Stress and anger no longer trapped Breathless as the music fades It's over too fast I strike my final pose As cheers and screams fill my ears Walking off stage...its over ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Nicely done! I really felt the various emotions involved here... the stagefright, the counting out loud, and finally it is over too fast? What we do best we do in a trancelike state, it has been said. Then you take a final bow and think "It's over." The relief of it, it seems to me. But do you enjoy the dance? BTW, i just posted a poem with a similar title to yours. Nice coincidence, eh? ^_^ Always a pleasure. Keep up the great work. -Allan Eternal life without the darkness isn't life at all- it is a lobotomy. |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Just like always great poem you express yourself very well. Keep up the awsome work! Lauren |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
A rollercoaster of emotions written in one little poem... Great job Keep it up Jason "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
DancinQueen: Nice poem. Beautifully written and a good description of emotions. ~AF~ "Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement." Christopher Fry |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was great. yea i have friends who are dancers, this described how they feel nicely. They try to explain it to me and this poem did nicely.......  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Hey peach Through the lines I could see that you enjoy what you do Only in enjoyment can you loose time, and it seems like to you seems like it goes to fast  I had the chance to see ya dance, but you know .....  maybe next time, just tell me when on second thought, not maybe, but next time for sure Nice to see you love what you do later sweets < !signature--> I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR [This message has been edited by acire (edited 01-10-2001).] |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
wow!it was really good, all the images you wrote about were very vivid. Is this ballet...tap....jazz ballet..hip hop.....well enjoy dancing its always fun. I hope to read more. Regina |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
this poem was really filled with a lot of imagery i could practically see you dancing on the stage, counting aloud and striking that pose.. well done I must say ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
wow~~Thanks everyone. Ina~> Well i do all that you mentioned, but this particular poem is about a jazz dance... ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Wow, I really like how you wrote this one, it seems very descriptive (I say seems because I'm not a dancer )< !signature-->"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com [This message has been edited by Lakewalker (edited 01-11-2001).] |
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