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Dopey Dope
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0 posted 2001-01-09 01:23 PM


Life (The Saga Continues):


This life,
This monotone sense of reality.
We've all been lost in the maze
At least once or twice in our time.
Sooner or later we're just going to
Knock our noses on the corner wall
And turn around, look for direction,
And inevitably knock it again.

This life,
This cliché masquerade of being unconsciously conscience.
Being a part of the non-existant present.
To put it simply, we're blown out
Never-gonna-be's of future ions to come.
Corner walls worn down with bumps.
Bleeding noses with misguided eyes.
Such is life, and the saga continues.




I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

© Copyright 2001 Pepe de la Muerte - All Rights Reserved
keoni
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1 posted 2001-01-09 02:13 PM


Awesome!Man I totally like this one. Excellent job!
Jon


"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine

Allan Riverwood
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2 posted 2001-01-09 02:52 PM


You admirably capture the meaning of life.  No bull either, you don't pretty it up at all, you just lay it all down.  A daring poem, and for this reason, very good.  Great as always, DD.
jeremydraul
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3 posted 2001-01-09 02:59 PM


very deep...
not sure what the meaning is.. but im sick so i have an excuse
i guess ill wait for allan to give it a try!
great poem my friend...loved the title too
~JDR

"Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde

Jose Marti
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4 posted 2001-01-09 05:39 PM


this poem was good i like it a lot, you really are a first class poet hector. but what a dismal view of the world
Ina
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5 posted 2001-01-09 09:15 PM


it was amzing, as always Dopey. Its always nice to read your stuff.
REgina

Kit McCallum
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6 posted 2001-01-10 06:12 AM


Powerful imagery Javier ... great expression in this piece. You really relayed a vivid picture with these words, and transferred the mood to the reader well ... nice work!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

anonymousfemale
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7 posted 2001-01-10 07:08 AM


Dopey: As usual, a great piece of writing. Nice way of conveying your emotions.

~AF~

"Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement."
Christopher Fry


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8 posted 2001-01-10 07:05 PM



  Probably one of my favorites from you Javi. Thanx for blessing us with your talent. Much love.
  ~Carly

inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog...

Lakewalker
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9 posted 2001-01-11 01:50 PM


This one made so much sense to me, and I totally agree with Kit.  

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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