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niceguy Member
since 2000-11-13
Posts 113Sapello, NM, USA |
Together We've both gone through hard times, But we can make it. We've felt the hurt and pain, Yet we're still standing. We've broken down our barriers, Proved that we could care. We've drawn closer together, Surpassed everyone's expectations. We've both gone though hard times, But we can make it...together. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
You say you've both gone through hard times... like it is a concluding thought, yet you say that you will make it through together. Does this mean that you have come upon a new obstacle? Just a thought. Nice poem. |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
Yes, indeed a nice poem.. hmm.. or perhaps in expectation of more rough waters ahead? ACK *turns off the random thought generator he installed in his head* computer engineering class, hehe, we do wackey things ~_~ anyway, nice poem, I like it. "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \ I am lost in my own mind. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
niceguy: A good poem. It is interesting that you have listed everything you have gone through and still come out on top. You seem to me to be positive in the outcome. So with positivity comes success and if you want to make it, you will.  Nice work. ~AF~ "Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement." Christopher Fry |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Great Poem... I used to think that love could overcome any obstacle it comes across, I still believe that, but I now also know that if the love is not to be forever then it can't overcome all obstacles, I hope everything works out for you!! Melz!! P.S. Great Poem!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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niceguy Member
since 2000-11-13
Posts 113Sapello, NM, USA |
Thanx for all the replies. Glad that you liked the poem. Wasn't to sure how this one would be taken. Thanx alot! "Don't take love for granted...once it's gone, it hurts." |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was great. I hope you stay together and rise before all. Good luck!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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niceguy Member
since 2000-11-13
Posts 113Sapello, NM, USA |
Hey, thanx Dopey. Glad ya liked it. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I like the attitude shown in this, that you can make it. Being together through hard times can really help build a relationship. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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niceguy Member
since 2000-11-13
Posts 113Sapello, NM, USA |
Thanx a lot for the reply lake. Glad you liked it. Thanx. "Don't take love for granted...once it's gone, it hurts." |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
SO cute! Great job. |
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