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BabyGirl1 Member
since 2000-07-02
Posts 91Morris, IL |
This is a poem I wrote after watching a movie that really got me thinking. I felt pain for both the mother and the child and decided to write a poem about it. I see her as I walk down the street She stays away from the rest of us Alone-off to the side Faces stop and stare at her All her clothes torn and tattered Her face covered with dirt and grime No money in her pckets No place to call home Walking day by day with no where to go I see her child standing next to her His eyes so empty, so vacant His body so small from having no food He tries to hid next to his mother Hiding from all the stares and glares He knows no other life than this No other life than poverty He doesn't know that his life is wrong He only knows he loves his mother The pain is too heavy for her heart to bear The pain cused by all the stares Caused by no money for food or shelter Caused by seeing her son live this kind of life Th thought of keeping him in this lfe with her Is there a way out for him? Or can he survive with her? Finally a werd stands out in her head ABANDONMENT If she leaves him alone, they will come Come take him away Give him a better life than he has now He will be able to eat three meals a day He will be able to take a bath every day He will be given clothes without holes He will be able to go to school I see her sometimes She stays away from hte rest of us All alone Standing on the step No money in her pocket No home No child by her side. |
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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
I'm the one that suggested you post this one, so you know how much I love it. It's poems like this that show the power and virtue you hide sometimes. Compassion is not a fault it's the strength and thread of individuality that makes you the person you are. TAP2 |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
This, I'll admit, is the best piece I've read from you so far. It's very deep and something we just don't get to read about everyday. I'm just glad your in the forum...honestly. Jeremy "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Incredible writing BabyGirl! Very thought-provoking and such depth. Your closing brings it together beautifully. Such a picture of sadness and hope wrapped all together. Really well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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BabyGirl1 Member
since 2000-07-02
Posts 91Morris, IL |
Thank you all for your comments on this poem. I am glad that you enjoyed it and are able to get the same feelings I felt while writing it. Thanks! |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Hello there, I loved this poem and it was very deep. I hope that you keep this up. Take care. Chel "True friends stab you in the front" |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
This poem is very touching. The sights that you describe in this poem have actually been seen by my own two eyes. I spent 3 years of my life as a social worker volunteer at a third world country, and believe me, it's not a beautiful sight at all. It is really sad that people have to go thru a life like that. Here in the U.S., though poor doesn't have the same meaning as in third world countries, it still is a problem that we have to solve. Thanks for reminding us of this problem. EXCELLENT WORK |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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