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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
I look outside my window and in amazement I do find. in contemplation lay one soul so saddened yet dignified He dwindles in his self pity so weak and yet he’s brave. I do not even understand the impression he has made. He’s attentiveness as he observated the sky that wonderous day how can i put together what I’m trying to say. He’s selflessnes i saw in him but turncoat he did be. I should have acknowledged his disposition was not a match with me. I should have propunded the situation before i took control I wish this would subside i’m sorry honey I didnt know. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
it was really good. but i got alittle lost with the big words, my vocabulary isnt very big. graet poem Regina |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
first of all WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!! here, you will find people to be really uplifting. Just stay away from Dopey  j/kwonderfull...I love your first post. Seems like passions is getting more and more better poets recently. And yes, I think you are one of them. Your style is so unique from the others, but at the same time, it expresses the poem clearly. One question though...What exactly did you do? I'm curious, but you don't have to tell if you don't want to. Thanks for the read and keep em coming I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Welcome to Passions! This is a very well-written piece. It's really hard to see someone you love in this position, and you describe it very well. Thanks for sharing. "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
Regina, i am sorry about the big words there didnt mean to get anyone lost. heheh acrie, Thank you for the welcome and about your question.......well i'll let a few people think about it before i actually tell my little secret. |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
love bug thanks for your welcome and thoughts on my poem. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Welcome to Passions! Great post.......i hope to see more of you around!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
This was a super 1st post!! I can't wait for more  ~Carly inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog... |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
simply intriguing 1st post.. im sure theres more wondrous peices to come best wishes ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
 Welcome to Passions Nice job on your first post here! I hope you like it here, post some more for us to read "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Yes, they are all right. Especialy the warning about dopey! he's a trouble maker... lol. Terific poem. I really enjoyed it I look forward to your next post Jason "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
You sound and write very much like somebody that I know... to the point that I find myself wondering whether or not you are. Either way, great poem. I love this, and welcome to the family! |
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Author Unknown Member
since 2001-01-05
Posts 57Linn MO USA |
gotta applaud ya on this one, great first post to start it off with  *dont let life bring you down, dig thru the ditches and deck it in the face and reclaim your place*---Kyle Finn....2001 |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
wow, I haven't really been here that long myself (shhh like 2 or 3 days) but i've read as many poems as I can and yours is one of the best I've seen. I really hope I get to read many more from you. |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
Dopey_dope~Thank you for the welcome Child of the stars~I am very happy you think this was a great first post that means alot to me. Jeremy~intriguing.Intriguing.I am sorry I seem to have a foundness to the word. Thank you for your welcome. Isgone~thank you for the welcome as well as reminder or the warning lol Lakewater~thank you for your welcome Isgone~ thank you for the welcome and reminder of the warning lol Unknown~ thank you for the applauding me very much appreciated Poet on Acid~ Thank you very much for what you said it means a very very lot to me. Allan Riverwood~ I saved your thank you for last only because of what you said. I find it to be very intriging that because of my poem you may think I am someone i may not in all actuality be. It is very wonderful to have an impact like that on a person. I do not believe i know you or you I, but out of curiosity might i ask who is this person i remind you of? Oh and thank you for the welcome to your Family what a wonderful one it truly is. |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!! great first post!!! hope to see more soon!!~*Pixie*~ |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
Sorry about the typo with isgone didnt mean to say that twice. no offense to you isgone. I dont know how people take things here. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Welcome to Passions!! I know what your saying in this poem and i liked it a lot! I cant wait to see more from you! Great first post and keep em comin! |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Great first poem I can tell you are a great poet just be reading one of your poems.Anyway welcome to Passions and keep up the awsome work. Lauren |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Wow~ Im speechless, literally. trying to figure out what some of those words mean.wow. i cant wait to read more, but maybe next time you can put what the words mean at the bottom or something for the not-as-smart people in here lol great job*dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
GREAT WORK... Welcome to passions... look forward to seeing more!!Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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