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Bright_Eyes
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0 posted 2001-01-07 11:22 AM


I know,
when they find me,
I will die.
I've seen it before.
They don't understand.
I want people to love me for who I am.
You must tell them,
PLEASE TELL THEM,
to let me live.
The good fortune they finally see
doesn't come from me.
Because,
the day a four-leaf clover is picked,
is the day his luck has run out.


© Copyright 2001 Rebecca Peterson - All Rights Reserved
IsGona
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since 2000-07-14
Posts 723

1 posted 2001-01-07 11:26 AM


Oy yes.  This is good.  I must admit, the first time I read it I was confused(it's early for me).  This is a great medaphor.  Love to see more from you.
Jason

"Every body has their destiny...
I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN
~Hatebreed~

Allan Riverwood
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2 posted 2001-01-07 01:16 PM


Good job.  I enjoyed reading this.
Lakewalker
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3 posted 2001-01-07 02:22 PM


I had to read this twice to get it.  I guess I'm just a little slow sometimes   I like it, it's creative.  You did a really good job of writing this

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Dopey Dope
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4 posted 2001-01-07 08:07 PM


Great poem here.......kind of ironic considering the clover is good luck, but I see where you're going with this.....nice.


I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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