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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723
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Dreams... You give me reason To open my eyes To face this world I so despise You are my life You are my breath You are the reason To fear my death If I die You do too But I was real What were you? You are not What it seems You're not real Just my dreams I need you to help me heal You need me to make you real Because if you don't come true You're just a lie So grant your promise Before we die < !signature--> "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ [This message has been edited by IsGona (edited 01-05-2001).] |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
A real thinker... this one is... I think that I have a good idea what this is about, but could you clarify? It seems like you are talking about an ideal person that is carved into your mind... that you need to meet before death. Is this correct? |
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DreamerGrl27 Member
since 2000-10-29
Posts 142 |
I liked how you were so descriptive with your words and everything. It flowed really well...good job. |
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GirlsBestFriend Member
since 2000-12-27
Posts 71Planet Earth |
Fabulous! I loved it! keep posting IsGona please!! lots of luv< !signature--> "Isn't it funny how to the world you are nothing? But then to one person..you're the world" [This message has been edited by GirlsBestFriend (edited 01-04-2001).] |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I thought this was just about your dreams in general, not something that you dreamed about as Allan is thinking. Either way it works well, nice job on the poem  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Thanks for the replies. Allen you are pretty much right in your interpretation. The truth is my thoughts were really scattered when I wrote this so it doesn't make perfect sense. that's prolly why I don't totally like this one. It's basically about the fear of my dreams, the things I live for, never coming true. And maybe I humanized 'my dreams' because the dream I fear missing out on most is meeting that perfect girl, but Lake you are right this is mostly just about my dreams in genereal. I hope this makes sense. My thoughts are a little messed up right now. Anyhow, thanks again for the replies. Jason< !signature--> "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ [This message has been edited by IsGona (edited 01-04-2001).] |
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HiddenSparklez Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 190British Columbia, Canada |
You can tell that you were trying to focus on what your dreams were, but it also shows that you were kind of drifting away. But everything you write shows the state that you were in when you wrote it, and that's something we can't pick apart. But it's a great poem overall! |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Jason- Wow, this is very pretty. I hope you find her...you deserve to be happy! It's cool to see more new stuff from you! xoxo Jenn "A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ?? |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Ow, ow, ow! Deep thinker! I'm okay now. That was good. Made me think (hence the pain)... Keep it up, Jason, no matter what your dreams are... you can do eet!  ~*Rhonda "I am Canadian" - Joe If you set limitations upon yourself, it's no wonder you fall short of your dreams - Rhonda J. Adolph |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nice one here Isgona. I liked it a lot. Post more or perish!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
Oooooh GREAT work |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
BOO-TEE-FUL!!! this is absotively posolutely wonderful!! i love it! ~*Justine*~ |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
isgona, great poem i love the style that you use, its so unique keep on posting your poems cuz i love them so much best wishes ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
aww i love your poems. this was so cute, keep it up!! *dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Thank you all HiddenS ~ Yes my mind was drifting when I wrote this... Thanks for the comments. Jenn ~ Pretty? that's a new one  thanks hunRhonda ~ take some asprin... hehe Thank you so much for replying Dopey ~ Hey man I'm not the poet that all you are. I don't write that much. I post just about everything I write... I guess I will try to write more.. Thanks alot for the comments. Suga & Pixie ~ Thank you so muck. Your to kind Jeremy ~ Thanks. I'll post again just as soon as I write another poem. DQ ~ thank you for your nice words. Your a doll "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Author Unknown Member
since 2001-01-05
Posts 57Linn MO USA |
great poem really enjoyed it *dont let life bring you down, dig thru the ditches and deck it in the face and reclaim your place*----Kyle Finn....2001 |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
As I said before, I completely love it. You know you're cool!!!! I'm patiently awaiting your next post...much luv!! ~Carly inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog... |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Unknown ~ thanks alot for reading poem. Welcome to passions Carly ~ You are always so nice to me. THANKS "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Great Peom Jason... you write well and we always look forward to reading your work, hope some inspiration comes to you soon!! Melz!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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peanogrl83 Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202 |
Very well done! Nice flow! Kudos! Vreni |
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Neokrew Member
since 2000-12-24
Posts 60VA |
This poem was very good I liked it alot, I will be look forward to reading more of your work. --Neo |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Melz ~ Vreni ~ Neo, Thank you so much. It means a lot to get replies from great poets such as yourselves. Thanks again, Jason |
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Bright_Eyes Junior Member
since 2000-12-22
Posts 29Plymouth, MN |
I love the twist in this poem! (about how they really are a dream!) THIS IS GREAT WRITING! Keep up the wonderful work! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
All these questions about dreaming the question is, is it a dream or is it something you dream? in other thought, there is no reason why we can't wonderful post Isgona keep em coming I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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