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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
it seemed like you were never there i always thought you didn't care. when i hit my 1st home run in the park you missed seeing in my eyes that glowing spark. then when i was 10 you didn't get to see that brand new bike that Santa brought me. i always believed Santa was for real, but it was really mom behind the whole deal. i was 12 when that camping trip went bad, all the other kids were having fun with their Dad's. trying not to show my hurting that way so i ran away the very next day. i think i was gone for a whole 3 hours all i did was stay in a cave and cower. afraid of what all the other kids thought of me to them a kid without a dad is all they would see. growing up without a dad is extremely hard, no one to play pass with in the back yard. atleast i had a parent who didn't go anywhere which is more then i can say for you, atleast for my life mom was there. *...Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below, because heroes come and heroes go...* - Creed |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
aww... this was sweet.. Be happy with what you have! And Im sorry to hear about your troubles, keep smiling  see it's easy! best wishes ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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HiddenSparklez Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 190British Columbia, Canada |
I totally understand where you're coming from... I grew up not knowing my father at all, and it's taken its toll on me now. I wish I could tell you it gets better, or you'll slowly forget him, but I can't because I haven't see it happen to me yet. All I can suggest is writing down everything you feel, because it's sure helped me. Great poem otherwise, it has gotten me to think again, about how lucky I am to have my mother. =) "You do what you do, you say what you say, you try to be everything to everyone... come on now, do that stupid dance for me" -Everclear |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Reading this... kind of allows me to appreciate my own father even more. He's rarely anything worthwhile, usually he spends his time drinking, but he spends the other time working to maintain the household, so I respect him there. I know that he sets a great example for me to avoid. Ironically, without him I would probably be a lot more like him! Whoops... this wasn't supposed to be about me! Great poem, the absence of a father obviously allowed you to love your mother ever so much more. This poem effectively portrays how you felt at one time, as opposed to how you feel now. |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Im sure wherever your dad is he loves you, I know mine does... and he died 16 years ago... I am gald that you love your mum the way you do... I could NEVER live without my mum!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
It sounds like you have really wanted your dad to be around and it has changed you because he was not, but at least you do have your mother. I think the poem expressed your feelings well, great job on it "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This showed a lot of emotion. Having to cope without a father in life must be really hard. It makes you strong though, and you are a strong person for posting this for us and expressing yourself openly. Great job on this.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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lilpoet Member
since 2000-12-30
Posts 55Dallas,Tx |
I have to say, this poem meant a lot to me. My dad or should I say "father" was never there for me. I'm 15 years old and I've only seen him 5 times...the first time was when I was 10. I'm trying to make an effort to see him now, but he doesn't like my family so he won't. I understand totally how you feel. He has missed my life, and in a blink of an eye, it's all going to be gone. Wonderful poem. I give it 5 stars ***** and more! |
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lilpoet Member
since 2000-12-30
Posts 55Dallas,Tx |
I have to say, this poem meant a lot to me. My dad or should I say "father" was never there for me. I'm 15 years old and I've only seen him 5 times...the first time was when I was 10. I'm trying to make an effort to see him now, but he doesn't like my family so he won't. I understand totally how you feel. He has missed my life, and in a blink of an eye, it's all going to be gone. Wonderful poem. I give it 5 stars ***** and more! ~If I had a star for everytime you made me smile, I'd be holding the entire midnight sky in my hands~ |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
Val this is so sad but I can sorta relate. My dad had a debilitating stroke three years ago plus he lives over 100 miles away, so he's been missing a lot, too. Because he has to, really... But it's great to have a supportive mother who's always there Good work |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
This is really sad Right now, I don't know how to react to the poem It has affected my feelings real hard right now I'm so sorry you have to go thru this I know how you feel though, my dad wasn't around too, though mine was around once in a while He never attended anything important to me and it hurts One thing it has done for me though is it has made me sooooo close to my mom and i think that is special...you should too thanks for the share keep ya head up I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
i am sorry to those who this poem brought back bad memories. i have my father, he has been there for everything. i was just writing this from another point of view. Sara, i'm sorry to hear about your dad. Everyone else, i just hope that you keep their memory close in your heart. ttyl ~*VALERIE*~ *...Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below, because heroes come and heroes go...* - Creed |
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