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Aphrodite
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0 posted 2001-01-07 01:56 AM


When I first saw him I knew it was true
That I'd love him forever
And I think that's what I'll do
He does something to me
That I don't know how to explain
But it makes me feel that I'm quite as not the same
My eyes wander off
And become full of sky
My body becomes lifeless
But it all makes me wonder why
I feel this way
When he's around
Maybe someday I'll be his
And he'll be mine
But adoring him right now is just fine
There's only one thing I can say right now
About this guy
And that is..
I think I'm in love with him..


'If I Saw him Only in My Dreams, I'd Sleep Forver '

© Copyright 2001 Aphrodite - All Rights Reserved
Allan Riverwood
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1 posted 2001-01-07 02:04 AM


Hey, this is the second of your work that I have seen... and I must say that I am truly impressed with your expressiveness.  You say that it is fine just looking, that you are content just admiring this person from the outside.  This may be true, but is that because you are afraid that you will be disappointed by what lies on the inside?  
If you already know this person well, then scratch this out.  Just an observation.

Dopey Dope
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2 posted 2001-01-07 01:58 PM


Well this poem was a great piece of emotion. Love is great and I surely hope that luck flies your way and you prevail in getting him. Good luck!


I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Lakewalker
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3 posted 2001-01-07 02:34 PM


I really like the way you described everything in this poem!  I hope that you two have the chance to be together

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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DreamerGrl27
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4 posted 2001-01-07 03:59 PM


I really liked this...I feel the same way. It's something thats hard to explain in words, but you did a really good job, you had a lot of emotion in it. I hope everything works out okay.
Acies
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5 posted 2001-01-08 07:57 PM


That's what dreams are for
But wouldn't it be nice to have it in reality
Why do you say you couldn't have him?
Go for it, seems like he's worth the try
Don't be scared, u got nothing to loose
thanks for the wonderful read

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


Pixie-Babe03
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6 posted 2001-01-08 08:11 PM


Great work   this is so cute   keep posting!!
~*pixie*~

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