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My True Mistake
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My True Mistake |
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Aphrodite New Member
since 2001-01-05
Posts 7 |
I don't know how to say it I don't know if it's true I think I'm falling head over heels, but still I don't know if it's true Whenever your friends are around you You constantly treat me like dirt But when your by yourself.. My feelings are never hurt I do not want to tell you What I really think In worry that you will hate me So my feelings are beginning to sink I think that I should just give up And let you on your way But I know that it won't be that easy So I'll try another day Was it true that I fell for you? Was it true you did not care? I think these answers are amazingly true I think that it's not fair So now it's all coming to me I should have always knew That what i did was a mistake And the mistake was falling for you |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
first of all, WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!! you should find everyone in here to be really friendly. And they are good ears too if you want to spill on someone  I love your first post, I saw all the emotions you were going thru with each line that i read. I don't think that it's your fault that you fell for someone. Our feelings is pretty hard to control. Thanks you for the beautiful read, and keep sharing keep your head up I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
First off, we don't choose who we love, love chooses US. Second, if he doesn't treat you in a nice way 100% of the time, you don't need him. Good luck and good post  Welcome to Passions! |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
I don't like to judge ppl with out even meeting them, so I'm not going to. But I will say that if this is how you feel... you don't deserve to. I hope you find the courage to confront this instead of letting it consume you. But enough of my lame advise... This was a great poem. Welcome to passions ... every one here is great... your going to fit in wonderfully. thanks for sharing this poem.Jason "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Welcome. A humble family of poets, we are. I, myself, am still rather new here, but I guarantee that you will find great inspiration and feedback to improve your ability almost instantly. You're gonna love it. I like this poem, the second piece of this nature that I have read today. Yes, unfortunately, love chooses us, we do not choose it. We can only try to cope with it. Keep writing it all on paper, and your body may feel comfortable forgetting these emotions, having recorded them. That's my biological theory on poetry, anyway. ^_^ And second of all, share them with us! We may see something that you do not in your writing! It happened to me earlier, and it could happen to you too! Oops... i'm babbling! I'll conclude by saying that you will truly enjoy every minute that you spend here. So make those minutes plentiful. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Welcome to Passions Aphrodite! We're glad you joined our community of poetry, and hope you'll enjoy your stay! This was a very expressive first post, nicely done and I hope all will work out for you. I look forward to reading more (ps .. Check your e-mail) Best wishes, /Kit |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Welcome to Passions!! You'll like everybody here except for Lakewalker.......he's mean. Anyway this poem was great! I hope to see more from you in the future!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
 Welcome to Passions Yeah, uh huh, riiiight, sure I'm mean, yeeaahh. Anyway, welcome to the forum, your poem has expressed your feelings so well, nice job and I hope to see you posting more "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Love quite often feels like a mistake, for once we lose it, it's hard to come to grips with not having... but don't view it as a mistake, view it as a learning curve... not a mistake... Good Luck... Melz!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
Esther  ,Didn't I tell you these people were awesome? Keep postin and we will keep reading  . Great poem.~Susie "Do you love me because I am beautiful, or am I beautiful because you love me?" ~Cinderella |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS!! This was an excellent first post. I was in a similar situation so i know exactly what your going through. I know you'll love it here at passions just as much as the rest of us. Keep the poems comin..i cant wait to read more!! great job! |
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