Teen Poetry #3 |
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Sweet Dreams, My Child |
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peanogrl83 Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202 |
Horrendous. Vreni Sweet Dreams, My Child Silver banners reflect cold eyes, Walls of silence absorb the lies. Excessive rage falls down dead Eaten through with molten lead. Trifle’s tapestry now returns, Displayed by genius left unburned. Resentful moths parade about Exquisite finery of self-doubt. Ambling laughter’s drunken path, Marooned by lord Zeus’s wrath. Salty ribbons festoon desire Mistress Rage lays lit afire. Youngest yet the newborn hope, Crumpled mass, unfit to cope. Humor’s eyes remain so shut, Injured egos deflate, now cut. Languished pride’s total twist, Dried confusion it assists. |
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lilpoet Member
since 2000-12-30
Posts 55Dallas,Tx |
I'm a little confused on this poem, but maybe it's because I'm only 15 and I don't know very many of those BIG words yet. But I'm sure whatever they meant that this was a wonderful poem. All poems are wonderful. And I think that if you can write poetry with BIG words then you have much talent. ~If I had a star for everytime you made me smile, I'd be holding the entire midnight sky in my hands~ |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wonderful poem. I think that from now on i will count how many words I do not know within the poem. HEY I URGE YOU ALL TO DO THE SAME!!! ATTENTION ATTENTION!!!! When anybody reads Vreni's poems.....I'm going to put a number of how many words I didn't understand due to the vocabulary issue I got going on....so if you want, do it too! haha. today's number is....4 Anyway good one here vreni! ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Acies![]()
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
total number is: 2 ![]() What I don't understand is all this hate. I've talked to you Vreni, and it seems like you have a nice world you live in. Well, I guess we are never satisfied with what we have. Keep em coming.... I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
LOL Dopey, your always starting something. Your right though I usualy need a dictionary handy when I read Vreni's poems. You have great talent Vreni, and you have a tremendous vocab. Love your work. This one is great. You write with such emotion. Anyhow great poem. Jason oh yeah and learned 3 new words... thanks! |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
Grand total: 3 *LOL* Good work, here! *claps* ![]() |
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Allan Riverwood![]() ![]()
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I feel smart-- didn't learn a single new word! ^_^ Great poem, Vreni. I didn't expect that type of poem from the title, but it was a pleasant surprise. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
As usual this is very well done, thanks for sharing this! And for Dopey's sake, my total was 2 ![]() "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
great poem.. Im also a little confused but the rhyme was great and i hope to read more of your "horrendous" work total #= 4 best wishes ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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Dopey Dope![]()
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Apparently, everybody knows more words than me!!!!!! *cowers under his desk* GEEESH! I don't like this anymore! haha ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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