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X_me_X Junior Member
since 2000-08-18
Posts 37 |
i jus wrote this one but im thinking about giving it to my bf on our anniv. how many smiles would it take to express the joy i feel when you hold me how many dollar bills would it take to express the value of the three beautiful words that u told me how many lifetimes would it take to express the length of my bliss in a minute with you how many heartbeats would it take to express the depth of my love which goes thru and thru how many breaths would it take to express the new life that you've breathed into me how many chains would it take to express how trapped my heart was before you set it free how many cages would it take to express how lonely i was before i met you how may memories would it take to express how im never going to forget you how many tears would it take to express the pain i feel when your not near how many heartaches would it take to express the agony you would leave me with if you left me in fear never will there be enuff of letters poems lines or words to express my love for you which forever burns |
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branden726 
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
This is really good. keep writting |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Nicely done. In this poem, are you trying to say that you have difficulty expressing your feelings to this person? Like you have told this person time and again, but it has never been enough? I get this impression. Correct me if I am wrong. |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
I liked this poem. I got a different sense than Allen though. I didn't get the feeling that this about not being able to comunicate your feelings, but about your feelings being so great it is imposible to quanify them. But I see how it could mean both. Either way, great job. "how many lifetimes would it take to express the length of my bliss in a minute with you" The above line was my fav Jason < !signature--> "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ [This message has been edited by IsGona (edited 01-05-2001).] |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I read this the same way Jason did, but now I see how it could be Allan's interpretation. Either way it's well done, I like it a lot!!  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
whoops lol [This message has been edited by DancinQueen (edited 01-05-2001).] |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
aww great job~this was so sweet! I really liked it, id definetly give it to them. keep it up!! *dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was sweet.....smiles are good. We should all do it a bit often. Supposedly it's scientifically proven that happy people who smile live longer than sad people who frown hehe....true...true  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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X_me_X Junior Member
since 2000-08-18
Posts 37 |
hey guys well im not sure the msg i jus posted went thru or not cuz it said theres an error and i pressed back and it wus gone anyways yah um this poem is about how much i love him and no matter how much i tellim and how much i do for him i can never express how much he means to me...but i dun think i do tell him or show him as much as i want to or should....so it could mean both anyways thanks for the replies later ~All is forgiven but NEVER forgotten~ |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Nice work, beautiful peice!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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Neokrew Member
since 2000-12-24
Posts 60VA |
Very good poem I like your work alot. |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
I really liked this, it was so sweet! YOu should DEFINATELY give it to your BF for your anniversary  Great work! |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
this would be one of the most thoughtful poems anyone could get i really enjoyed the way you compared these things to your love for him In the end i hope everything turn out fine best wishes ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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DreamerGrl27 Member
since 2000-10-29
Posts 142 |
I liked this one...I agree with you that you cant express your feelings, especially love in words...no matter how many words you use. This was really good! I would give it to him! |
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