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peanogrl83 Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202 |
Crap. Once again,my apologies. Vreni Reality’s We Self-help portrait of who I am Forgotten angel on the lam. Memories kiss the child I was Battles fought just because. Snapshot lie of man You are Distorted glow gone too far. Immersing detail of that You were. Shadow’s thoughts a darkened blur. Human weakness of which We failed. Crashing discord’s martyr nailed. Blind Athena’s wrath We won. Relax ideals, destroy your tongue. |
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pharon Member
since 1999-11-13
Posts 251alabama |
all i can say is i wish i could write "crap" like you! good job...once again! pharon |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
You once said that you loved the dexterity of my styles. Vreni, I don't even know what kind of style that is. The style you just wrote in was great! You are so talented. Wonderful poem!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
This is not crap! I liked it very much! It's different, and different is good  Great work! |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
If this was crap, then I like to examine crap! uhm.. whatever that means... anyways, i agree, your style is so special and it allows people to enjoy the words best wishes ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Jeremy ~ You've done enough crap examining (Bathroom Aroma) hehe Vreni ~ Once again another terrific poem and a unique style. One of these days we will convince you how good your work is, but until then... Keep posting this crap! "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Interesting style. Clever placement of the words, i never once, before today, saw how a different arrangement of words can change a poem's meaning. It just never applied before I read this. It gives the words a double-meaning that, in a way, makes this into a two-part poem. If this is crap, then get a plastic bag, go into the back room, and don't come back until it's full to the top with CRAP CRAP CRAP! Eww... maybe that was a bit much? Well, THEY started it... hehehe An incredible poem. Keep up the good work. |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Yeah I kinda gotta agree with the rest of the peeps here... you write great crap... keep it coming!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I think this style is creative, great job on the poem! (See, I can go without saying cra--- er, that c word)."Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
OMG!!! Just when I thought you can never outdo your other poems, you just proved me wrong. This is my favorite of yours indeed. I love it so much Vreni. You are undeniable that of talent's best friend  I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
OMG!!! Just when I thought you can never outdo your other poems, you just proved me wrong. This is my favorite of yours indeed. I love is so much Vreni. You are undeniable that of talent's best friend I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I'm trying to figure out if Allen was using the "crap" as a symbol...or literally speaking of crap.....hmmmmm.... I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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