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GirlsBestFriend Member
since 2000-12-27
Posts 71Planet Earth |
thank y'all for everything. I would, always, love to reply to everyone on their poems but I got a problem...I used to use internet through my college but they disconnected all the computers now and it costs me so much to use it from home with this slow pc! anyway, I'm trying! sorry, here I go: Baby, I always remember Times past and we're together You gave me the faith And the most important: love The only one in my life Who cares 'bout this boy People lookin' at me Whenever we walk, both I felt how lucky am I Findin' you as my girl But the better thing Is you were my best friend Cannot imagine Bein' with another girl Fallin' in love I'm sayin' no! I had enough With you, honey You were my love Still didn't forget that day When I said "Wish me born girl, I don't wanna lose you" Oh, me start again!! Don't you know this You were my beuatiful part? My happiness in life? You treated me right Just better than I deserve So "thanks" will be Never enough for what you've done But why you left fast? Didn't even say "goodbye"?! I'm wonderin' only How are you now? And wishin' only To hear you're fine Prayin' that you Never be down, no more. ~lots of luv "Isn't it funny how to the world you are nothing? But then to one person..you're the world" |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nice one, this had kind of a slang style to it. Not the grammatically correct language *I* often use, haha but i liked it. I used to right in ebonics just for the hell of it. Got boring after 4 poems. Anyway good one on this......you expressed your setiments very well.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
i liked this one also.. ..i kinda picked up on what dopey said too kinda creates a nice unique style best wishes ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hello there!! I really liked this one lots. The ending was definitely my fave part. Keep posting for us!! Lotsa luv! ~Carly inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog... |
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lilpoet Member
since 2000-12-30
Posts 55Dallas,Tx |
this was an awsome poem. i really liked it and i also absoulutly l-o-v-e your signature! ~If I had a star for everytime you made me smile, I'd be holding the entire midnight sky in my hands~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Yeah, what Dopey said, and nice job on this!  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
this is good. i like it a lot. reminds me of a song i love. hehehe oh well ttyl!! Valerie *...Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below, because heroes come and heroes go...* - Creed |
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GirlsBestFriend Member
since 2000-12-27
Posts 71Planet Earth |
thanks Dopey_Dope, jeremydraul, Child of the Stars, lilpoet, Lakewalker and sugarpie313. I wished u explained more, Dopey lol ~lotsa luv "Isn't it funny how to the world you are nothing? But then to one person..you're the world" |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Great Peice, I love it... there is nothing worse than loved ones not saying good-bye and just disappearing from your life, I know too well how that feels!! Melz!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
GREAT work! that is so sweet of you to write for your girl!!! i wish my guy would write stuff like that for me!! lol i am glad you are so happy and i hope to see more of your work soon!!! ~*Pixie*~ |
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GirlsBestFriend Member
since 2000-12-27
Posts 71Planet Earth |
sometimes it's just like nothing left in your hand to do, right? thank u Melz! u wish someday a guy write u a poem, Pixie, and I wish 'she' just read one of my poems once! anyway, thanks for replying. ~lotsa luv "Isn't it funny how to the world you are nothing? But then to one person..you're the world" |
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