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my crack at the "I Am" challenge
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my crack at the "I Am" challenge |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg 
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Ok, here's mine I kinda rushed it, so it's a little sloppy enjoy! I am a seeker, walking a line I wonder what lies on either side I hear whispers from left and from right I see the threshold in the distance I want to keep my eyes from straying I am a seeker, walking a line I pretend that i have all the answers I feel hatred for what i don't dare to see I touch the air before me, looking forever onward I worry that my true love will walk not the same I cry when I see people corrupt by their Gods I am a seeker, walking a line I understand that people feel pity for me I say that my path is without prejudice I dream of straying to left or to right I try to keep on without looking those ways I hope there are people walking behind me I am a seeker, walking a line |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Walking a straight line, without straying tward temptation is not an easy thing. But you sound like a strong person with good ideas, and a good grasp on the world. With that in mind I think you'll do just fine walkin along your chosen line. hehe I just rhymed...lol Challege met beautifully, Jason< !signature--> "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ [This message has been edited by IsGona (edited 01-08-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was a nice one Allan. You met the challenge well. I liked it and enjoyed the read.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
I could really see into your soul with this piece. As long as you stay on that line you are walking on, you'll be ok. Challenge well met! "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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Greeneyes617 Member
since 2000-11-22
Posts 329Arkansas |
I like it....GOOD job.  |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Great job on this, it's good sometimes to think about who you really are. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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