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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA 
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k i know i already have one poem posted, but disregard it cause this one is better, in my opinion  ~*Silent Tears*~ Drowning in an ocean of regret Painful memories I long to forget Stirring echos all through the night My savior is nowhere in sight My road of life has always been uphill Wishing on stars, gazing from my windowsill Visions of the way things should be They never turn out as you want, you see A reason to live, to be happy and smile I've been searching for quite awhile My dreams have been overshadowed by my fears As I continue to cry these silent tears LOL k so maybe its not better but who cares! < !signature--> ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ [This message has been edited by DancinQueen (edited 01-03-2001).] |
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kimmy Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 98 |
this was a great poem...i loved it..it showed a lot of emotion and everything..it was great... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was sad. I hope things are good with you. Silent tears......hmmmmm....nice one there. See you around!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
that was cool.  I personally like them both, so... style was awesome ~*Rhonda "I am Canadian" - Joe If you set limitations upon yourself, it's no wonder you fall short of your dreams - Rhonda J. Adolph |
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CareBear3 Junior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 39New Hampshire |
this was really good, the emotion in it was incredible....even though it was sad...it brought about an aura of hope....it was cool. "In great moments life seems neither right nor wrong but something greater it seems inevitable" ~Kelley |
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DreamerGrl27 Member
since 2000-10-29
Posts 142 |
This was really beautiful, but it was so sad. I'm sorry and I hope everything is going okay. Your words are so descriptive, I pictured the whole thing in my mind. I absolutly love this part: "My road of life has always been uphill Wishing on stars, gazing from my windowsill" This is so similar to my life. Great job! |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
this is a wonderful poem.. but it is so sad!!! keep your chin up!! ~*Justine*~ |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
i think this may be one of your best poems written i hope these tears stop flowing before you drown!!!!! hehe... keep'em coming best wishes ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
"My dreams have been overshadowed by my fears" You know, if you realize this is true, than you have to do something about it. Don't sit around waiting for something to come, go out and find it. Make your dreams come true, don't wait for them to come to you. How easy do you want life to be? Ok, maybe I've overreacted to your poem here, but so what < !signature-->"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com [This message has been edited by Lakewalker (edited 01-04-2001).] |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
The fact that you say "drowning" makes you seem so helpless-- and the fact that you are waiting for a "savior" suggests that you are playing a passive role, and are sad about it. If you expect others to come to your aid, it is sometimes best to make the first move yourself. |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
thanks for all the replies..BUT IT IS JUST A POEM..glad u were all knocking my supposive feelings. ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
hmmmm...i think i'd like to right a continuation to this one. can I sweets? I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Great poem keep up the awsome work. Lauren |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
thanks Lauren IM me sometime!!acire~~ Sure, go ahead! i dont mind ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
If this is just a poem then I'm just Elvis!!! lol ok maybe it is just a poem but it's a good poem... thanks for the read ps I'm not really elvis. I was just kidding  < !signature--> "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ [This message has been edited by IsGona (edited 01-04-2001).] |
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TrueLUV Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 158Connecticut, U.S.A. |
The poem was great and sad, but I felt it hope those tears stop falling |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
The term "just a poem" is illogical, in my opinion. No poem is "just a poem," or it wouldn't even BE a poem, it would be a random arrangement of pretty words. Poetry is the most powerful tool on the planet. It can be completely elating, or can bring you to tears. Don't underestimate the power of poetry! It has a great amount of leverage. |
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X_me_X Junior Member
since 2000-08-18
Posts 37 |
i liked this one i never read anotha one but i really liked this one good job |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Hey sweets --- you know, that's actually what made this poem so good. When readers see so much feelings in it that they actually think you went thru the situation first hand. Next time, please explain before you write the poem so noone gets too concerned...later peaches I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
sorry ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I'd just like to say that if I was bashing your "supposive feelings" (and I seem to do that to people a lot), that I'm sorry. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
hey DQ -- no need to apologize, that just means you wrote something great lates sweetsI see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This was such a good poem..i really liked it a lot but it was sad hun. I havent talked to you in a while you gotta fill me in on whats happening in your life hun! |
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lilpoet Member
since 2000-12-30
Posts 55Dallas,Tx |
This was a wonderful poem!!! I totally feel the same way. I liked everything about it...kind of made me sad though. I think about that stuff all the time. Good job on the poem! ~If I had a star for everytime you made me smile, I'd be holding the entire midnight sky in my hands~ |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
wow~ ive been out of town all weekend, but thanks so much guys *dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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