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DancinQueen
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0 posted 2001-01-03 07:47 PM


k i know i already have one poem posted, but disregard it cause this one is better, in my opinion  

~*Silent Tears*~

Drowning in an ocean of regret
Painful memories I long to forget
Stirring echos all through the night
My savior is nowhere in sight
My road of life has always been uphill
Wishing on stars, gazing from my windowsill
Visions of the way things should be
They never turn out as you want, you see
A reason to live, to be happy and smile
I've been searching for quite awhile
My dreams have been overshadowed by my fears
As I continue to cry these silent tears


LOL k so maybe its not better but who cares!
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¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

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kimmy
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1 posted 2001-01-03 07:49 PM


this was a great poem...i loved it..it showed a lot of emotion and everything..it was great...
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2 posted 2001-01-03 07:51 PM


This was sad. I hope things are good with you. Silent tears......hmmmmm....nice one there. See you around!


I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

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I admire it daily

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3 posted 2001-01-03 07:55 PM


that was cool.   I personally like them both, so...   style was awesome

~*Rhonda

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4 posted 2001-01-03 08:59 PM


this was really good, the emotion in it was incredible....even though it was sad...it brought about an aura of hope....it was cool.

"In great moments life seems neither right nor wrong but something greater it seems inevitable"

~Kelley

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5 posted 2001-01-03 09:04 PM


This was really beautiful, but it was so sad. I'm sorry and I hope everything is going okay. Your words are so descriptive, I pictured the whole thing in my mind. I absolutly love this part:
"My road of life has always been uphill
Wishing on stars, gazing from my windowsill"
This is so similar to my life. Great job!

Pixie-Babe03
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6 posted 2001-01-03 09:33 PM


this is a wonderful poem.. but it is so sad!!! keep your chin up!!
~*Justine*~

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7 posted 2001-01-03 10:31 PM


i think this may be one of your best poems written
i hope these tears stop flowing before you drown!!!!!
hehe... keep'em coming
best wishes

~JDR

"Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde

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8 posted 2001-01-04 12:39 PM


"My dreams have been overshadowed by my fears"  You know, if you realize this is true, than you have to do something about it.  Don't sit around waiting for something to come, go out and find it.  Make your dreams come true, don't wait for them to come to you.  How easy do you want life to be?    Ok, maybe I've overreacted to your poem here, but so what < !signature-->

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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9 posted 2001-01-04 12:50 PM


The fact that you say "drowning" makes you seem so helpless-- and the fact that you are waiting for a "savior" suggests that you are playing a passive role, and are sad about it.  If you expect others to come to your aid, it is sometimes best to make the first move yourself.
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10 posted 2001-01-04 02:59 PM


thanks for all the replies..BUT IT IS JUST A POEM..glad u were all knocking my supposive feelings.

¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

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11 posted 2001-01-04 06:53 PM


hmmmm...i think i'd like to right a continuation to this one.  can I sweets?  

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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12 posted 2001-01-04 07:15 PM


Great poem keep up the awsome work.
  Lauren

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13 posted 2001-01-04 09:45 PM


thanks Lauren   IM me sometime!!

acire~~ Sure, go ahead! i dont mind


¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

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14 posted 2001-01-04 10:52 PM


If this is just a poem then I'm just Elvis!!!
lol  
ok maybe it is just a poem but it's a good poem... thanks for the read

ps I'm not really elvis.  I was just kidding  
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I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN
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TrueLUV
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15 posted 2001-01-04 11:59 PM


The poem was great and sad, but I felt it hope those tears stop falling
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16 posted 2001-01-05 01:02 AM


The term "just a poem" is illogical, in my opinion.  No poem is "just a poem," or it wouldn't even BE a poem, it would be a random arrangement of pretty words.  Poetry is the most powerful tool on the planet.  It can be completely elating, or can bring you to tears.  Don't underestimate the power of poetry!  It has a great amount of leverage.
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17 posted 2001-01-05 02:06 AM


i liked this one
i never read anotha one
but i really liked this one
good job

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18 posted 2001-01-05 09:29 AM


Hey sweets --- you know, that's actually what made this poem so good.  When readers see so much feelings in it that they actually think you went thru the situation first hand.  Next time, please explain before you write the poem so noone gets too concerned...later peaches  

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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19 posted 2001-01-05 12:37 PM


sorry

¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

Lakewalker
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20 posted 2001-01-05 12:44 PM


I'd just like to say that if I was bashing your "supposive feelings" (and I seem to do that to people a lot), that I'm sorry.  

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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21 posted 2001-01-05 03:23 PM


hey DQ -- no need to apologize, that just means you wrote something great    lates sweets

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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22 posted 2001-01-07 12:44 PM


This was such a good poem..i really liked it a lot but it was sad hun. I havent talked to you in a while you gotta fill me in on whats happening in your life hun!
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23 posted 2001-01-07 01:17 AM



This was a wonderful poem!!!  I totally feel the same way.  I liked everything about it...kind of made me sad though.  I think about that stuff all the time.  Good job on the poem!


~If I had a star for everytime you made me smile, I'd be holding the entire midnight sky in my hands~

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24 posted 2001-01-07 10:11 PM


wow~ ive been out of town all weekend, but thanks so much guys  

*dq


¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

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