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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA 
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umm..Untitled...just because there are so many things im afraid to tell you but i cant tell if this feeling is true im trying to put it into words but there's a part of me you've never heard would you catch me if i fall do you even think about me like that at all there are so many things im holding back i guess confidence is one thing i lack will you tell me how u feel so i'll stop guessing cause when it comes to you ive been stressing will you dry my tears and calm my fears or is all this just wishful thinking? save my drowning heart, its slowly sinking ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
wow... ...gotta say I loved this one.. hmm... needs a title: "Insecurity" "Comfort My Heart" "Rescue Me" Meh, those stink but great post! best wishes ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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DreamerGrl27 Member
since 2000-10-29
Posts 142 |
This one was really good...I know how you feel about guessing how someone feels about you...it does get stressful. As for the title, maybe "Wishful Thinking," or "My Drowning Heart," or "Would you catch me?" Just some suggestions. |
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Virgil Junior Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 43Toronto, Ontario, Canada |
I'll save you! jk, nice poem tho, I enjoyed it mucho <-----(Spanish for "much") "By other ways, by other ferries, not here, shalt thou pass over: a lighter boat must carry thee." "I AM CANADIAN!!" |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Keep 'em coming, eh? Beautiful, as usual  .~*Rhonda "I am Canadian" - Joe If you set limitations upon yourself, it's no wonder you fall short of your dreams - Rhonda J. Adolph |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
me gusto mucho. La poema tenia sentimientos hermosas. Sigues asi!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
hey sweets --- you should talk to him. why are you holding yourself back? How can you find the answers if you just keep guessing and not even ask for it. Be strong ok....  smile peachesI see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
The thing about guessing is that people tend to guess the worst possible outcome. Think positively and talk to him! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
It can be very unhealthy to keep such powerful emotions hidden from somebody so important. As LW mentioned, talk to him. |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
~*just a poem*~ once again ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Now you tell us  and yes that's a frown/pout I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
grrreeeat poem  beautifully written~*Justine*~ |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
acire~now i KNOW you did not just frown!! You better watch out since i'll be in Chicago this weekend! WHICH you're coming to see me right? Great..cant wait *dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
sweets --- i really don't know if i will. Erin hasn't said anything yet if she is. You know the deal. Well, i guess you'll know when you see the clue Email me or something, ill give you my cell so we could talk about that....talk to Erin too. lates sweet peachI see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
well im leaving in like 10mins, so its too late for the cell thing. but dont worry about it...ure too scared to come anyways ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
u never know sweets, u never know I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Hun!! What is happening!? This poem is so sad...it sounds like your trying to reach out to your guy...aww come on please tell me everything is ok with u 2...please??? =o) You gotta update me...i hope things get better and you get what your looking for.  Muahz |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Well your poem is very sad but also I can relate with it so it's very good. Keep up the awsome work. Lauren |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
thanks again guys *dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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