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DancinQueen
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0 posted 2001-01-02 09:42 PM


umm..Untitled...just because

there are so many things im afraid to tell you
but i cant tell if this feeling is true
im trying to put it into words
but there's a part of me you've never heard
would you catch me if i fall
do you even think about me like that at all
there are so many things im holding back
i guess confidence is one thing i lack
will you tell me how u feel so i'll stop guessing
cause when it comes to you ive been stressing
will you dry my tears
and calm my fears
or is all this just wishful thinking?
save my drowning heart, its slowly sinking


¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

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jeremydraul
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1 posted 2001-01-02 09:47 PM


wow...
...gotta say I loved this one..
hmm... needs a title:
    "Insecurity"
  "Comfort My Heart"
        "Rescue Me"
Meh, those stink but great post!
best wishes

~JDR

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DreamerGrl27
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2 posted 2001-01-02 09:52 PM


This one was really good...I know how you feel about guessing how someone feels about you...it does get stressful. As for the title, maybe "Wishful Thinking," or "My Drowning Heart," or "Would you catch me?" Just some suggestions.
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3 posted 2001-01-02 10:04 PM


I'll save you! jk, nice poem tho, I enjoyed it mucho <-----(Spanish for "much")

"By other ways, by other ferries, not here, shalt thou pass over: a lighter boat must carry thee."

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4 posted 2001-01-03 12:34 PM


Keep 'em coming, eh? Beautiful, as usual  .
~*Rhonda

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If you set limitations upon yourself, it's no wonder you fall short of your dreams - Rhonda J. Adolph

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5 posted 2001-01-03 12:38 PM


me gusto mucho. La poema tenia sentimientos hermosas. Sigues asi!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

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I admire it daily

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6 posted 2001-01-03 05:57 PM


hey sweets --- you should talk to him. why are you holding yourself back?  How can you find the answers if you just keep guessing and not even ask for it.  Be strong ok.... smile peaches

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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7 posted 2001-01-04 12:14 PM


The thing about guessing is that people tend to guess the worst possible outcome.  Think positively and talk to him!

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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8 posted 2001-01-04 12:17 PM


It can be very unhealthy to keep such powerful emotions hidden from somebody so important.  As LW mentioned, talk to him.
DancinQueen
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9 posted 2001-01-04 03:01 PM


~*just a poem*~ once again

¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

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10 posted 2001-01-04 06:55 PM


Now you tell us  

and yes that's a frown/pout  

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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11 posted 2001-01-04 08:13 PM


grrreeeat poem   beautifully written
~*Justine*~

DancinQueen
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12 posted 2001-01-04 09:43 PM


acire~now i KNOW you did not just frown!! You better watch out since i'll be in Chicago this weekend! WHICH you're coming to see me right? Great..cant wait  

*dq


¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

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13 posted 2001-01-05 09:36 AM


sweets   --- i really don't know if i will.  Erin hasn't said anything yet if she is.  You know the deal.  Well, i guess you'll know when you see the clue    Email me or something, ill give you my cell so we could talk about that....talk to Erin too.  lates sweet peach

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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14 posted 2001-01-05 12:44 PM


well im leaving in like 10mins, so its too late for the cell thing. but dont worry about it...ure too scared to come anyways

¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

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15 posted 2001-01-05 03:20 PM


u never know sweets, u never know  

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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16 posted 2001-01-07 12:36 PM


Hun!! What is happening!? This poem is so sad...it sounds like your trying to reach out to your guy...aww come on please tell me everything is ok with u 2...please??? =o) You gotta update me...i hope things get better and you get what your looking for.   Muahz  
TopGunLauren
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17 posted 2001-01-07 12:45 PM


  Well your poem is very sad but also I can relate with it so it's very good. Keep up the awsome work.
  Lauren

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18 posted 2001-01-07 10:21 PM


thanks again guys  

*dq


¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

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