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CareBear3 Junior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 39New Hampshire |
In every second that passes new questions whirl throughout my mind. A tornado of thoughts and opinions dancing together of all movements, all shapes, and all kinds. The eagerness I feel to express my desires, the fear that holds me back. The unexplainable courage, I feel I seem to lack. The way I want to tell you every emotion that I feel. The way I want to show you that my visions aren’t surreal. The way I dream of the future, the way you want me to be. The way you express your wishes, of what you want from me. All become grouped together, in a pot of inhibition. Hindering my plan, and diminishing my ambition. I wish for once you’d listen, not just hear but comprehend. And trust I’ll make the right decision, when it comes together in the end. I know you do this cause you love me, but let me make mistakes. For through those many problems, in life I’ll find my place. "In great moments life seems neither right nor wrong but something greater it seems inevitable" ~Kelley |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was nice, I liked it. Keep the posting.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Right on... Just love it! gonna put it in my library...  Keep it up!~*Rhonda "I am Canadian" - Joe If you set limitations upon yourself, it's no wonder you fall short of your dreams - Rhonda J. Adolph |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
it was really good. had a nice flow. powerful emotions Regina |
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Greeneyes617 Member
since 2000-11-22
Posts 329Arkansas |
Great poem.Keep up the good work. |
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DreamerGrl27 Member
since 2000-10-29
Posts 142 |
I really liked this...you have a lot of talent. I loved how you talked about tornados of thoughts and emotions. My favorite part was this though: The way I want to tell you every emotion that I feel. The way I want to show you that my visions aren’t surreal |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
good visions portrayed here i liked: "The way I want to tell you every emotion that I feel. The way I want to show you that my visions aren’t surreal." graet job best wishes ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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mikeykrazy Junior Member
since 2000-12-20
Posts 37U.S.A |
this was a grate poem and i love the flow of it all... strong emotions here keep posting thing happen in life that just need a poem. then ther poems just for the heack of it. |
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DYME Member
since 2000-07-29
Posts 104Texas |
VERY DEEP. IT WAS WOUNDERFUL. I WAS REALLY FEELING THIS ONE. YOU KNEW EXACTLY HOW YOU FELT. DYME NO WEAPON FORMED AGAINST ME SHALL PROSPER... ISAIAH 54:17 |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Hey, Good job of expressing all of this! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
This was really cute, way to get it all out! This was my fave part: "I wish for once you’d listen,/not just hear but comprehend." Good work |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
To put it quite simply-- Great poem! |
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