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Moving Forward |
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Will DeVore Junior Member
since 2001-01-01
Posts 12Weddington, NC, USA |
When you move ahead Do you know where to tread? Or do you just aimlessly roam Look about for home? I may not know where to go But if you're inclined so Then by all means join with me I could use the company Together we'll move about Those who oppose us we'll clout None shall keep us from our goal Even if it's only a sandy shoal What will come of thee If you come along with me? How are we to know Unless you actually go? Everything's worth a first chance Under almost any circumstance 1/4/01 -= Will =- |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Great Post, where the road will lead us no-one knows but it is always great to have company along the way!! Melz!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
....loved the rhyme you did a good job at flow and meter not much more to say.. . ...cant wait to read more best wishes ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
it was a great poem Will. Those are some of the questions i ask myself about moving ahead. well done. good talent. hope to see more. Regina |
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Skyfire 
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Like it, poem!!  That is so cool! Keep it up!~*Rhonda "I am Canadian" - Joe If you set limitations upon yourself, it's no wonder you fall short of your dreams - Rhonda J. Adolph |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Hey, hope things work out for you. Goals can always be achieved if you are determined enough. If it's with a relationship, then both of you have to have that devotion to one another to make it all work. Good luck!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
It is indeed sometimes hard to know where your road will take you...although like Dopey said, there are times when you can have an influence on it. Great work, nice to see you at passions, I don't believe we've met yet! *Krista Knutson* I'm a slow dying flower In a frost-killing hour The sweet turning sour and untouchable... -Natalie Merchant |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I like your attitude here, that "Everything's worth a first chance". I really think this poem is written vey well, and even if you have to "aimlessly roam," at least you're out there "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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mikeykrazy Junior Member
since 2000-12-20
Posts 37U.S.A |
i really like this poem because for the first four lines: When you move ahead Do you know where to tread? Or do you just aimlessly roam Look about for home? i rome around a lot sometimes looking for a place to sleep. well any way loved the poem keep posting thing happen in life that just need a poem. then ther poems just for the heack of it. |
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