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Ina
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0 posted 2001-01-02 12:48 PM


Im back everyone....hope this poem works...

Dear you,
the pain you caused me will never
fade away. I need to hurt you back
for lying to me. when they come and
take you away from me, am I still
suppose to love you?!
you tell me you never lied, that everything
you say is true, then why do they tell me
you arent who you say you are!
G-ddammit! i gave you my heart! i gave you
everything! I told about everything from
broken hearts to my abusive childhood!
You took advantage of my heart and my already
shaky life.
Do you want to fall over and never get up?
am hanging on with on one finger and i'm
finally gonna slip!
and all you can say is "i never lied to you"
i want to hurt you!but more than that I still
want to love you. If they're wrong I swear
I will never forgive them or myself, because
right now all I can think about is all the good times!
so dear love, I will stay your darling angel
until time ends, but if u are still lying to
me than you'd better forget i exist and forget
that we ever existed.
Good-bye love
until we meet again.

                   Regina



© Copyright 2001 Regina Levy - All Rights Reserved
Greeneyes617
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1 posted 2001-01-02 01:17 PM


I liked this a lot. It gave me goosebumps.  
jeremydraul
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2 posted 2001-01-02 02:33 PM


simply powerful
i have to admit, its almost a bit too harsh but it works well with your anger
cant wait to read more
welcome back

~JDR

"Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde

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3 posted 2001-01-02 04:06 PM


Ina nice to have you back. This was pretty sad and I hope this is not about Brad.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Ina
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4 posted 2001-01-02 04:16 PM


thank u all, for your replies.
Jeremy- hell im pissed off beyond belief. im glad it works.
Greeneyes-thats what i felt goosebumps
Javier-i thought he loved me!:'( i dont know what happened it just happened fast. talk to u later.
    Regina

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5 posted 2001-01-02 05:19 PM


Woah. Very deep. I'm sorry about what's going on... I sorta know what it's like. You're doing the right thing, though... I'm not making much sense, am I? LOL

~*Rhonda

"I am Canadian" - Joe
If you set limitations upon yourself, it's no wonder you fall short of your dreams - Rhonda J. Adolph

Pixie-Babe03
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6 posted 2001-01-02 05:53 PM


wow... this is very powerful, i could feel your emotion throught the words.  i hope everything gets better, no one deserves to go through this kind of pain   awesome work though! keep posting!!  
~*Justine*~

Ina
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7 posted 2001-01-02 06:51 PM


Rhonda- it sux big time doesnt it?
Justine-ya your right no one should have to deal with this.
thank u both for your replies
Regina

those who love us,will always love us.those who hate us,may g-d turn their hearts,if he cant may he turn their ankles so we can see them by their limp

DreamerGrl27
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8 posted 2001-01-02 08:55 PM


This poem definetly worked...I loved the way you set it up as a letter. I'm sorry that this happened to you and I really hope everything is better soon.
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9 posted 2001-01-03 05:18 PM


This poem was great...I hope everything works out for you and gets better. Good job!
Lakewalker
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10 posted 2001-01-04 12:06 PM


Very strong words you use here, your emotions really show in this one, great writing.

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11 posted 2001-01-04 12:10 PM


A simple solution reveals itself-- show HIM that poem, and see if he understands.  I know what it is like to be in a relationship based on lies, almost a fictional love.  I was once at the lying end myself, and i regret it now.  Reading this poem brought back some memories for me.
Thanks for stirring up my emotions a little.  ^_^

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