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Scaling The Mountain
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Scaling The Mountain |
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Tears of Glass Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 182Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure |
I am climbing a mountain, And it's a difficult journey. When I am at the midpoint, I see the top of the mountain, And I know that is where I want to be. I climb slowly and carefully, Toward the healthy and satisfying life At the top of the mountain. The journey is rocky and dangerous And I do slips at times, But as long as I stay above midpoint, And I keep the top of the mountain in my sight, I can hold on to hope of reaching the top. I carry weights that make it difficult to climb, And they often pull me down toward the bottom of this mountain. I try to cut the weights away, And let them fall, But I can't. My desire for thinness, Lack of self esteem, Eagerness to please others, And undeserving thoughts have become a part of me. They are no longer weights that I carry, But a real part of everything I think, Feel, And do. As I slip toward the bottom, I lose sight of my goal to reach the top. I now strive to just hang on and survive. It becomes difficult to hang on, And I slip faster towards the bottom. I begin to think the bottom is where I want to be, And stop reaching out for hands along the way, To pull myself back up. I convince myself, I am not lonely, I am not hurting, And I do not need help, I let go and fall. As I lay in the fog at the bottom of the mountain, I try to picture the top and can't. I wonder if there is a top to the mountain, And can I ever, in my lifetime, reach it? *Jennifer |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Great work, the top always seems soo far, but one day you will get there and that day will be the happiest day of your life!! Keep up the great work!! Melz!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Powerfully written Jennifer! Vivid imagery in this emotion-filled piece. When the sun burns off that fog, you will see the top again, and I'll tell you what ... you keep climbing up, and we'll keep reading ... deal?  Best wishes, /Kit |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
wow, i liked this one too... well i havnt met one of your poems i didnt like, get well and stay on the top once you reach! ~JDR "A writer doesn't acquire a vacancy of mind, but rather a inadequacy of words." - Jeremy D. Raulinaitis |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
This was a truly great piece. How many times I've been at the bottom...One thing I didn't do is realize how many people were there with me, willing to help me climb... ~Carly inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was great. You'll get to the top if you want it bad. good luck!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Hun, you will get to the top. I promise you that. Just don't give up, kay? Need to talk, just mail me. ~*Skyfire "I am Canadian" - Joe If you set limitations upon yourself, it's no wonder you fall short of your dreams - Rhonda J. Adolph |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
You'll make it to the top one day if you stay committed to getting there. Good luck on your climb! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
wonderful!!! Just don't give up the last thing you want is to accept failure you should always strive to be better not because of others, but cause of yourself thanks for the read keep sharing I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Don't always strive for the summit. It's best to stop every now and then to enjoy the view. The journey there is much more rewarding than what is on top, i assure you. Be patient as you climb, and keep writing. Consider it a helium balloon to cancel out a few weights. Excellent poem. You are truly talented. |
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