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Ceinwyn
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0 posted 2000-12-31 03:04 PM


I am but a spiritless faerie
Dancing in your mind's eye
Caught up in a web of your deceitful lies
You loved me once
But I can never remember when
All I know is that you cast me out like an unforgivable sin
Let me tell you something
As I lie fast asleep
I silently hold onto your heart
And cry each time it misses a beat
As I walk upon it with my tiny feet
Can't you no longer feel me?
Nor see me in your dreams
Tell me why, why do you cast me out
Like I'm just a nightmare
Envading your dreams
I'm just a spiritless faerie
Now that you've left me
And still will be
Whenever you come back crawling upon your knees...

© Copyright 2000 Kristen Brandon - All Rights Reserved
Dopey Dope
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1 posted 2000-12-31 05:35 PM


This was so sad......i hope things get better cuz this sad stuff is just horrible for me to read.......hope you get happy soon!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Melster
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2 posted 2001-01-01 03:46 AM


the word here are beautiful, the meaning however is sad to see as Dopey said, hope things get better for you!!

Melz!!


Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly

jeremydraul
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State of Despair
3 posted 2001-01-01 04:58 PM


got to agree with the previous peep's, sad but good words!

~JDR

"A writer doesn't acquire a vacancy of mind, but rather a inadequacy of words." - Jeremy D. Raulinaitis

anonymousfemale
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Limbo
4 posted 2001-01-02 01:27 AM


Ceinwyn: As everyone has written already, this is a horrible thing to happen to someone. Things will look up though, life always does.

The timing however is never how anyone wants.

~AF~

"Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement."
Christopher Fry


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5 posted 2001-01-02 07:02 PM



  I really liked this. It seems like something I might write...Things will get better for ya...

   ~Carly

inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog...

Lakewalker
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6 posted 2001-01-03 01:29 PM


I agree with the others, and nice job on this one

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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Alwye
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In the space between moments
7 posted 2001-01-03 09:23 PM


Very sad and very well written work.  I loved the faerie aspect...kind of shows our fragility, doesn't it?  Anyway, wonderful poem!

*Krista Knutson*

I'm a slow dying flower
In a frost-killing hour
The sweet turning sour and untouchable...
-Natalie Merchant

Suga_Baby
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8 posted 2001-01-04 08:36 PM


I liked this very much! It was CUTE and it was powerful   NICE JOB
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