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And She was Called an Angel
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And She was Called an Angel |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI 
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This is a bit simpler than I normally find myself writing, but oh well...Enjoy. And special thanks to the person that called me an angel... So many nights her eyes did wake To stare at nothing but the wall A loner, outcast, what you wish Tall girl, and yet, so very small Responsible, did what she's told Raised under tender, gentle hands Now taught to write and love among The farthest starlit ocean lands Dreamt nasty dreams, thought nasty thoughts Yet did not think lust hardly wrong One word. Her soul was lifted up. She is an angel, loved and strong. |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
Awesome poem!!  So many nights her eyes did wakeTo stare at nothing but the wall A loner, outcast, what you wish Tall girl, and yet, so very small Great job!! Keep writing! Much luv, ~*~SweetStuff~*~ ~*~GoOd fRiEnDz ArE hArD 2 FiNd, HaRdEr 2 LeAvE, & iMpOsSiBlE 2 fOrGeT~*~tHe HaRdEsT tHiNg tO Do iS wAtCh tHe 1 U LuV, lUv sUm1 eLsE~*~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was wonderful carly......i loved it. Very positive and uplifting. Good job on this one.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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DreamerGrl27 Member
since 2000-10-29
Posts 142 |
This was really creative, I liked it a lot. I loved this part: A loner, outcast, what you wish Tall girl, and yet, so very small |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
beautiful descriptions: "Now taught to write and love among The farthest starlit ocean lands" I loved it, keep writing! ~JDR "A writer doesn't acquire a vacancy of mind, but rather a inadequacy of words." - Jeremy D. Raulinaitis |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
you never seize to amaze me with your writing. What talent bestowed on such a young person. Seasoned writing as though the summer's on numerous laps, and so does the fall.  keep em comingI see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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HiddenSparklez Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 190British Columbia, Canada |
You said before that this poem was one of your simpler ones... how complex do your poems get?? Loved the lines "Now taught to write and love among/The farthest starlit ocean lands" |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Thanks everyone!! Like I'd ever stop writing...hehe...Some things are so complex that I don't understand them weeks after writing them...Well thanks again, you guys rock  ~Carly |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Carly, this is beutiful. You are "an angel, loved and strong." I like the 1st, 2nd, and 3rd verses the best  It's great to see you writting such a happy poem.Jason "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Wonderful, it sounds as if a very sad girl, suddenly is able to be quite happy, if this is about you... kudos!! More power to you, try and keep this attitude. I loved the poem, keep writing. xoxo Jenn "A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ?? |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I liked this poem a lot! It was so simple yet it had so much meaning to it...i like that Great job and keep it up! |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Great poem... look forward to more!! Melz!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
can i say, Wow!! holy cow this was a great poem you expressed feelings well in here wow great poem. "i just love when you bring your whole crew because its just a bigger piece of cake for me to chew threw" |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Very well done! You told the story of her nicely. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I like this one a lot, it's really a good poem !"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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GirlsBestFriend Member
since 2000-12-27
Posts 71Planet Earth |
WOW!!! Carly..to me this is perfect! whatever I'll try, never gonna write something like this. wish I read something like this everyday (and written by you) lol lot's of luv "Isn't it funny how to the world you are nothing? But then to one person..you're the world" |
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