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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair 
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This poem is about daydreaming and getting away from any work or stress you may have. Enjoy "Fictitious Visit" In demand of a daydream, right about now, Irksome labor pressures upon my brow, May I ache of bliss, not of this fatigue, And dream about the sea's many leagues, Intoxicated with joy, I shall fall asleep, Bother me not while I’m counting sheep, Drifting away, to my far-off rainbow land, It’s glorious all day, isn’t that so grand, When I rise, I won’t ask what I passed, Moments of oblivion keep my life massed, Getting aside sometimes, helps me to cope, Especially when my land’s air, is full of hope So as I rest, think not of throwing a word at me But rather, put a head down to slumber dreamily Jeremy D. Raulinaitis 1/2/01 < !signature--> "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde [This message has been edited by jeremydraul (edited 01-02-2001).] |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nice poem, the flow was great and i really liked the theme. I often wish i could escape the stress...  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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~Angel Of Darkness~ New Member
since 2001-01-02
Posts 1O'Fallon Illinois |
I really liked this. Sometimes it is good to get away, even if it is only in your mind. "So we reach into the raging chaos, and we pluck some small glittering thing, and we cling to it, and tell ourselves it has meaning, and that the worl |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
i am a daydreamer myself so i can relate to this one  it si brilliant! great work once again!~*Justine*~ |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
Cute poem! I LOVE to daydream! World History class, anyone? *LOL* I like the rhyming couplet at the end (oooh *techinical* terms *LOL*) Nice work! |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
..thanks everyone history? oh yea.. but math is more boring... gotta love when the teacher calls on you when your gone in a world of dreams.... ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
it was good. man do i love daydreams they takeu away from a horrible world. REgina |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Doesn't it seem like school is the easiest place to daydream?? I guess most people just want to get away from it Nice job on the poem, and keep dreaming everyone "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
much thanks ....kiss kiss ..hug hug keep on dreaming! ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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