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Thinking out aloud |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
This is short... You cannot read a book aloud, And profess to know everything. You cannot destory hope in a human being, And think that life will continue. You cannot breed such infectious hatred, And shrug it off like nothing. You cannot treat me like this, And think that the world will keep rolling. I know this is an extremely dogdy piece..but things happen and people you thought you knew don't have the traits that make them a human being at all, like emotions or a conscience. "Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement." Christopher Fry |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Powerfully written Anonymousfemale ... it's difficult when we see sides to people that shake our foundation in humanity. I hope better times are ahead ... Best wishes, /Kit |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was great. You write about the painful truth. It's hard to even think some people have cruel character traits....oh well.....you know.......just think about those who are true at heart. Always helps a bit. nice poem.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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HiddenSparklez Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 190British Columbia, Canada |
True it is short, but it's also sweet... meaning right to the point. I think it's great when poets take a break from using complex words to show how they're feeling... what you've written is simply simple and beautiful in it's own unique way. |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Wow. I especially like the end two lines. You cannot treat me like this, And think that the world will keep rolling. I don't know why, but that part just... got to me. Right on!  ~*Skyfire *~Always Canadian*~ ~*~I used to be an idiot, but I'm all right now~*~ |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
To know good one must no evil. That used to be my little quote. Now it's just something I keep in the back of my mind. Everyone has a dark side and the ability to burn. Some people push this behavior into a regular trend of theirs. You're going to find more like this and I just hope that you learn how to get beyond it. You seem to be doing a good job of that. This was a really good poem. Very honest and clear in it's motives.  Angel I am no one if not myself. ~*SeLf PrOcLaImEd FrEaK oF nAtUrE*~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I like this one because it is to the point. Good writing, keep it up !"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Thanks for the replies everyone! Kit: it is extremely difficult when we see those sides of people. Unfortunalty, better times were not ahead..it got alot worse. But life goes on as they say. Dopey Dope: Luckily I have found a couple of those people, its just the rotten eggs in the bunch that disgrace the good. Hidden: Simplicity is such a wonderful thing to have when you are feeling like this. When you need to get something out as quickly as I did, simply words often describe it best. Skyfire: I'm glad the last two lines did something for you. It meant alot to me too. Angel: I love that quote. It is so true and hits me so close to home. I agree with the fact that everyone has the ability to turn however, one must also learn to see through the superficiality first to not become swept up in their nature. Getting beyond situations and people is a very hard thing to do at times. Fortunatly for me, I have found the support that I need to get past it, but it still only marginally makes it better. These people still linger in the back of my mind but do not affect it quite as deeply. Lakewalker: Getting to the point is always so much easier than having to fight my way through words I don't see any meaning to at that present time. "Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement." Christopher Fry |
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mikeykrazy Junior Member
since 2000-12-20
Posts 37U.S.A |
i like this poem. in the poem it feels like you r talking about someone who lies and cheats just to better him or her self. if so these people just arn't looking around them but only ahead and for them selves. well that is what i think tell my what you think from mikey thing happen in life that just need a poem. then ther poems just for the heack of it. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Mikey: That was pretty much what I was trying to say. That and I am sick to death of inconsiderate people. ~AF~ "Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement." Christopher Fry |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I see where you are coming from. It's true that some poeple don't even seem to have the natural trait of being human, and that is to do good. I hear you. They'll get what they deserve.....thanks for the read I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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