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Skyfire

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since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

0 posted 2000-12-30 12:43 PM

** I wrote this during Socials last year, and I think it turned out quite well. If not, well, just let me know... I won't get mad!

If you want to talk with me,
You must first sing with me.
If you want to sing with me,
You must first fly with me.
If you want to fly with me,
You must first soar with me.
If you want to soar with me,
You must first run with me.
If you want to run with me,
You must first walk with me.
If you want to walk with me,
You must first fall with me.
If you want to fall with me,
You must first rise with me.
If you want to rise with me,
You must first love me.
If you want to love me,
You must first respect me.
If you want to respect me,
You must first have a friendship with me.
If you want a friendship with me,
You must first talk with me.

DancinQueen

Senior Member

since 2000-07-29

Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA

1 posted 2000-12-30 12:48 PM

i love your poems..this was great. i liked the style, keep it up

*dq

¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

Kit McCallum

Administrator

Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

2 posted 2000-12-30 11:36 AM

This is lovely Skyfire ... all wonderful friendships begin with a few simple words, very nicely done!

Best wishes,
/Kit

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

3 posted 2000-12-30 11:37 AM

You got a lotta talent...i loved this one it was great =o) Keep em comin!

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2000-12-30 12:24 PM

Ok wait a second.......ok hehe the poem was great i liked it......i analyze it too.
Ok so i read it forwards......and i was like.....wow nice.......ok so then i read it backwards....and again i was like....wow nice.
Ok so i came to the conclusion.......here it is:
If you want to talk to me
You must first talk to me.

i mean.....it goes around in circular reasoning.......it starts with talk and ends with talk.
So......that has to be the conclusion.
To talk you must talk.....

am i psycho here or something?

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

sweetstuff101
Member

since 2000-07-27

Posts 375
OK, USA

5 posted 2000-12-30 01:55 PM

Hey thats cool!! I luv it!! I don't knwo what it is about it...but for some reason I just really really like this poem!! Great job, keep writing!!!

Luv alwayz,
~*~SweetStuff~*~

~*~GoOd fRiEnDz ArE hArD 2 FiNd, HaRdEr 2 LeAvE, & iMpOsSiBlE 2 fOrGeT~*~tHe HaRdEsT tHiNg tO Do iS wAtCh tHe 1 U LuV, lUv sUm1 eLsE~*~

DreamerGrl27
Member

since 2000-10-29

Posts 142

6 posted 2000-12-30 03:06 PM

This was really amazing...I loved the way it flowed so well. I know what Dopey's talking about when he said it was a circular reasoning, it really is. This was so creative...I really loved it!

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

7 posted 2000-12-30 05:44 PM

I'm with Dopey on this one. I know he is a psycho, but still, I agree

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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Tears of Glass
Member

since 2000-12-04

Posts 182
Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure

8 posted 2000-12-31 02:04 PM

This poem is really good! I really like the way you started with something, and used it to move forward with your poem.. does that make sense? Well, I really like your poetry! I cant wait to read more from you, so keep posting!

*Jennifer

Melster
Member

since 2000-12-09

Posts 442
Brisbane, Qld, Australia

9 posted 2001-01-01 04:10 AM

Great poem... look forward to more!!

Melz!!

Melster
Member

since 2000-12-09

Posts 442
Brisbane, Qld, Australia

10 posted 2001-01-01 04:10 AM

Great poem... look forward to more!!

Melz!!

Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly

IsGona
Senior Member

since 2000-07-14

Posts 723

11 posted 2001-01-02 11:40 AM

Well Dopey, you may be a psycho but I thaught the same thing.

To talk to me you must merely talk to me and all these other thisgs (soaring, flying, loving) are possible by simply following step1(talking). Very creative Rhonda. I really enjoyed it.
Jason

"Every body has their destiny...
I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN
~Hatebreed~

Pixie-Babe03
Member

since 2000-08-29

Posts 387
Central Maine

12 posted 2001-01-02 09:15 PM

i love love love it!!! LOL
~*Justine*~

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