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Skyfire
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0 posted 2000-12-29 06:44 PM


Would you let me fly,
Long and high in the purple sky?
Watching the stars fall like the snow,
Would your vocabulary have the word "no"?
They fall so gently, without a sound,
When they reach it, they light up the ground.
The sky is turning turquoise now,
And to you I make this vow:
I'll love you forever, I'll stay by your side,
But I need you to promise to let me glide.
Up with the stars, kissing the sky,
I need my freedom, please let me fly.
The castles are gold,
you need to be bold.
To let me fly, to let me go,
I promise you I won't fly too low.
I'll come back to you, you have my word,
I have to return, for I'm only a bird.

© Copyright 2000 Rhonda Adolph - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2000-12-29 06:46 PM


True you are only a bird, yet a bird with desire's of freedom........free gliding, and a freedom to be. I like this one.......goes along with that famous saying......
bla bla let it go......
bla bla if it comes back
bla bla it was meant to be...

something like that.....hehe
Good job on this one.......hope to read more!



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2 posted 2000-12-29 06:59 PM


This was a very beautiful poem that you've written. I hope things work out for you.  

I am no one if not myself.

~*SeLf PrOcLaImEd FrEaK oF nAtUrE*~


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3 posted 2000-12-29 08:21 PM


This was so amazing! I loved the whole thing about making a vow to love forever as long as you can be free. You deserve to be able to fly in a relationship, I really loved this one a lot!! Great job!
Virgil
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4 posted 2000-12-29 09:38 PM


Wow, cool poem!  Tommy likey...Tommy likey a lot! We will see more, yes?
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5 posted 2000-12-29 09:48 PM


Yes, you will see more. As long as we get to see more of yours!  

~Skyfire

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6 posted 2001-01-01 02:46 PM


Hey,
Good job on this one!  I like how you wrote it

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7 posted 2001-01-01 02:54 PM


awesome as usual!!

*dq


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jeremydraul
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8 posted 2001-01-01 04:31 PM


you have really good ideas! this one definately represents that famous quote! awesome work.

~JDR

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9 posted 2001-01-02 07:46 PM


beautiful!!!  beautiful!!!  beautiful!!!

I am so amazed with this poem.  I love it  

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10 posted 2001-01-02 09:13 PM


i am REALLY liking your work!! you ahev much talent!! this poem was so beautiful!! keep it up!  
~*Justine*~

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11 posted 2001-01-03 12:47 PM


"I'll come back to you, you have my word,
I have to return, for I'm only a bird."
Beautifully penned
Fly!!! Fly away my dove... hehe  
Great poem.  
Jason

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I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN
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12 posted 2001-01-03 01:34 AM


Jason, you're great. Thanks for the comments, peoples! Means a lot to me... One of my faves  
~*Rhonda

"I am Canadian" - Joe
If you set limitations upon yourself, it's no wonder you fall short of your dreams - Rhonda J. Adolph

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