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Skyfire 
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding 
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Would you let me fly, Long and high in the purple sky? Watching the stars fall like the snow, Would your vocabulary have the word "no"? They fall so gently, without a sound, When they reach it, they light up the ground. The sky is turning turquoise now, And to you I make this vow: I'll love you forever, I'll stay by your side, But I need you to promise to let me glide. Up with the stars, kissing the sky, I need my freedom, please let me fly. The castles are gold, you need to be bold. To let me fly, to let me go, I promise you I won't fly too low. I'll come back to you, you have my word, I have to return, for I'm only a bird. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
True you are only a bird, yet a bird with desire's of freedom........free gliding, and a freedom to be. I like this one.......goes along with that famous saying...... bla bla let it go...... bla bla if it comes back bla bla it was meant to be... something like that.....hehe Good job on this one.......hope to read more!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
This was a very beautiful poem that you've written. I hope things work out for you.  I am no one if not myself. ~*SeLf PrOcLaImEd FrEaK oF nAtUrE*~ |
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DreamerGrl27 Member
since 2000-10-29
Posts 142 |
This was so amazing! I loved the whole thing about making a vow to love forever as long as you can be free. You deserve to be able to fly in a relationship, I really loved this one a lot!! Great job! |
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Virgil Junior Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 43Toronto, Ontario, Canada |
Wow, cool poem! Tommy likey...Tommy likey a lot! We will see more, yes? |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Yes, you will see more. As long as we get to see more of yours! ~Skyfire *~Always Canadian*~ ~*~I used to be an idiot, but I'm all right now~*~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Hey, Good job on this one! I like how you wrote it "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
awesome as usual!! *dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
you have really good ideas! this one definately represents that famous quote! awesome work. ~JDR "A writer doesn't acquire a vacancy of mind, but rather a inadequacy of words." - Jeremy D. Raulinaitis |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
beautiful!!! beautiful!!! beautiful!!! I am so amazed with this poem. I love it  I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
i am REALLY liking your work!! you ahev much talent!! this poem was so beautiful!! keep it up! ~*Justine*~ |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
"I'll come back to you, you have my word, I have to return, for I'm only a bird." Beautifully penned Fly!!! Fly away my dove... hehe Great poem. Jason "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Jason, you're great. Thanks for the comments, peoples! Means a lot to me... One of my faves ~*Rhonda "I am Canadian" - Joe If you set limitations upon yourself, it's no wonder you fall short of your dreams - Rhonda J. Adolph |
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