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Soft Darkness |
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kimmy Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 98 |
Slowly slipping into darkness False accusations shortly rising Falling from endless decisions Crossroads meet at a point Climbing slightly over the ledge Collapsing at the beginning Candles wick fading lightly Dripping melted onto the floor Carefully watching everything dying All alone in a room of people Standing, sitting in invisibility Overlooking the world spin On one knee the adventurer fallen Breathless, grasping the ground No one can save a hopeless soul Brightness overcomes the eyes Crying through lifetime of sorrow Forgetting happiness never found Pictures frozen of memorable moments Lost amongst times of hardship Mirror images mean so much more Together last feelings collide Mixed emotions seem to subside Dazed and confused bleakly staring Unto the phase of pure selflessness Pludging to secrets unrevealed Punctured by those thought loved In fields of flowing sadness Lost amongst the weeds Tears crashing of worthlessness Slowly slipping into darkness Open to the world around Tumbling from the empty sky. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Powerful emotions flow through these lines Kimmy ... beautifully written in a style that flows very nicely with the sorrow behind the words ... very well done. Best wishes and hugs to you, /Kit |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
awesome awesome awesome...u sure have a talent that i wish i had! You better keep writing  *dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
i envy your talent.....i see you don't post much often, i think you should share more i'd love to read your other poems  BRAVO!!! I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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HiddenSparklez Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 190British Columbia, Canada |
Great poem, u had me on the edge of my seat after the first line =) |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
this is really well written, i enjoed it! ~JDR "A writer doesn't acquire a vacancy of mind, but rather a inadequacy of words." - Jeremy D. Raulinaitis |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I thought this flowed well, it's very well done! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I'm going to have to echo everybody else. Well done on this piece.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This was such a powerful poem...your words had such meaning to them..i liked it a lot..keep it up....  |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Good job, Kimmy. Sounds like you feel a little like I've been feeling recently. good luck to you. xoxo Jenn "A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ?? |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
GREAT WORK... as everyone has said!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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