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~*~PrettyGirly~*~ Member
since 2000-11-04
Posts 83Fitchburg Ma Usa |
div align="Center"> Why do you do this? you promised to be there then your not I could send this poem to you but then you'll go talk behind my back I don't need that you promise you all these things but are they true? no all my friends say your stupid, loser they all hate you I ask my self why do I put myself threw this pain no one has the answers why I do it either do I tomorrow comes by you'll be nice, sweet the next day will come you won't be so nice I don't get you Dave you destroy my self esteem I should not talk to you I should not wave HI or anything anymore your just like everyone else they love to distory me I can't be around you I can't see your face it will bug me to much one day you'll be sorry because you won't have a friend your already losing one.. Or am I losing myself...... < !signature--> If I could walk I'd be glad..But I'm glad the way I am- ~*~me~*~ [This message has been edited by ~*~PrettyGirly~*~ (edited 11-26-2000).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I like the little twist at the end with the last line. Anyway.......im not sure but a word is mispelled.....either its a voc. word i don't know or you mean DESTROY instead or destory. Anyway great poem!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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~*~PrettyGirly~*~ Member
since 2000-11-04
Posts 83Fitchburg Ma Usa |
thanks yes probably is destroy....  |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
The feelings you have are told very well here, I think you did an excellent job on this one. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Minna~ I think that you should really give this to him. Let him know what he is doing to you. It sounds like you are hurting. And you shouldnt be cuz some guys dont realize what they had until the lost it. Same with the girls. But show him how he is making you feel. People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey there. This was a great poem, and I too loved the twist at the end...keep that head up girl... ~Carly |
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~*~PrettyGirly~*~ Member
since 2000-11-04
Posts 83Fitchburg Ma Usa |
Erin, I gave it to him the next day, I went in my locker and saw a long letter and at the end said "Minna I'm sorry please forgive me, I was trying to be cool so my friends wouldn't hate me. But I don't want to lose a friendship between you and I". Then I wrote back to him and said you really hurt me and I didn't want to tell you but I had to because it was distorying me, at lunch he said "hey Minna I'm really sorry please be my friend again". So he's my friend again I hope he doesn't mess up. Thank you for all the replys everybody~ ~*~Minna~*~ A romance last forever you want it, A friendship last a life time |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Hey Girlie~! How are ya? I'm good..great poem But i'll have to say if he isnt making you happy, then you shouldnt be with him. But dont let your friends influence your feelings for him. Do what YOU want to do. Ive been down that road too many times...and i know you dont want to regret doing something just because you're friends told you to do it. Stay true to your heart Take care! -=Kiley=- "A true friend can see the truth and pain in your eyes, even when you're fooling everyone else" |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
hey Minna, guess i'm a little late on this one, but better late than never. Well, i'm glad to see that everything's resolved already. I was gonna tell you the same thing Erin said....the best thing is to comfront someone about your problems. Keep sharing I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Tears of Glass Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 182Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure |
Wonderful poem, Minna! I dont think I can say anything everyone else hasnt said, so I will just say you are very talented, and I loved that last line on this poem. It really makes you think... Awesome job! *Jennifer |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
this is such a strong poem, you are nto alone, it happens to the best of us, there will always be that jerk that makes it seem liek we can;t to anything right.. i hope it all works out for you and you arent; scarred badly, keep up the great work ~*Justine*~ |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
I know exactly how you feel. That is if this poem is from a personal experience I hate people who put other people down like that, it's like they are scared of other people doin it to them so they don't wanna give them the chance. well... great job!!! *do not offer yourself to the world, let the world offer itself to you*--Me :) ~*Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below,because hero |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
This is the kind of guy who brings about the saying "men suck". Don't stay with this dude. Kick him out of your life ASAP!!! You don't need the crap that he seems to be putting you through. No one needs it. ~*Skyfire *~Always Canadian*~ ~*~I used to be an idiot, but I'm all right now~*~ |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Great work... everyone has been telling you exactly what I would, so I won't say it as well, just do whatever it is that you think is right and it will be... look after yourself!! Melz!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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