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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania 
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Soon I can take all your pain away And stop wishing for the day The screams will be erased and Only silence will remain Within that gentle heart of yours. No more tears to be shed Lifting your worries away like fog On a cool winter's morning Waking up instead to the sweet Kiss like dew against your Warm as raindrop lips Arms wrapped lovingly around Like a protecting fortress Never letting any pain inside Touches igniting flames like The warm summer sun Burning deep within our hearts Warming us throught to our Souls like the warm autumn sun Soon I can let all your pain Drift away into me and you Will never need to worry again. "Do you love me because I am beautiful, or am I beautiful because you love me?" ~Cinderella |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Very beautiful and loving piece here...it's wonderful when we can take the pain away from someone we love. Great work, I enjoyed it!  *Krista Knutson* I'm a slow dying flower In a frost-killing hour The sweet turning sour and untouchable... -Natalie Merchant |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Hey, this is a great concept. Very well written, good job   Bel |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
Alwye~ Thanks. It's a really hard concept to write about for me because I have to see him go through the same thing over and over again and there is really nothing I can do about it other than try to keep his mind off of it. I wish I could do more. Bel~ Thanks. I'm really glad you enjoyed. ~Susie "Do you love me because I am beautiful, or am I beautiful because you love me?" ~Cinderella |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
That is beautiful... one day all will be fine for them... time heals most wounds!! Melz!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
Melz~ That's true, time does heal most wounds, but knowing someone I love being called an accident and a mistake every night by his parents. I know someday they won't be able to hurt him anymore, but in the meantime we still have to get through it. I'm not worried about him making it, he's the strongest person I know  .~Susie "Do you love me because I am beautiful, or am I beautiful because you love me?" ~Cinderella |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Do his parents really do that? That's awful. Your poem was good and I hope you can help him with this. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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HiddenSparklez Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 190British Columbia, Canada |
don't we all wish to make anyone's pain go away... great poem |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
wow, what a sensitive topic, i feel bad for you  I hope things get better and great write!~JDR "A writer doesn't acquire a vacancy of mind, but rather a inadequacy of words." - Jeremy D. Raulinaitis |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nice poem but i surely do hope things do improve! adios!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
Lakewalker, They sure do, and that's not nearly the worst parts . I try my hardest and I'll never give up on him.HiddenSparkelz, Thanks. Knowing someone I care about so much inside has to hurt so bad kills me. JeremyDraul, Nah, don't feel bad for me. It is a challenge I take on willingly. A sensitive topic, I suppose, but one the two of us are faced with every day. Dopey_Dope, Thanks. Me too. Someday, I suppose. Just not soon enough. Thanks everyone, ~Susie "Do you love me because I am beautiful, or am I beautiful because you love me?" ~Cinderella |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Wow. You are doing something that is so incredibly hard. I mean, when someone you care about is in that much pain... I admire you. Wish I could do the same for mine... Hope things get better, and you better keep writing, or I'll... I'll... I'll do something! ~*Skyfire *~Always Canadian*~ ~*~I used to be an idiot, but I'm all right now~*~ |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
Skyfire, Thanks a lot but it's nothing to be admired for. It just comes as second nature to me, I guess. I've seen too many of my friends hurt the way it is, I just wish there is more I could do about it. I try to keep writing, my life has been hectic. I work in a grocery store and yesterday we literally ran out of milk and bread, and the store is huge. Guess it's the storm that's just arriving. My life is starting to settle, though, so I'll be hanging around more. ~Susie "Do you love me because I am beautiful, or am I beautiful because you love me?" ~Cinderella |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
This is very beautiful! I can tell you are writing from the heart!! Great job, keep writing!! Much Luv, Priscilla< !signature--> ~*~GoOd fRiEnDz ArE hArD 2 FiNd, HaRdEr 2 LeAvE, & iMpOsSiBlE 2 fOrGeT~*~tHe HaRdEsT tHiNg tO Do iS wAtCh tHe 1 U LuV, lUv sUm1 eLsE~*~ [This message has been edited by sweetstuff101 (edited 12-30-2000).] |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
Priscilla, Thanks, I always try to. ~Susie "Do you love me because I am beautiful, or am I beautiful because you love me?" ~Cinderella |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Susie~it's just sickening to hear that your boyfriend's (?) parents treat him like that. Just sickening. It's a good thing he has you and that he is such a strong person. May the best come to you both in the future! Oh, and beautiful poem! |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
Elizabeth, I know, I couldn't believe it either. As for having me...I don't know about that one. He is the strongest person I know, by far though. Thanks. ~Susie "Do you love me because I am beautiful, or am I beautiful because you love me?" ~Cinderella |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
this is a beautiful, thoughtful, and emotinal poem. it is a powerful piece great work ~*Pixie*~ |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
this is a beautiful, thoughtful, and emotinal poem. it is a powerful piece great work ~*Pixie*~ |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
This is so sweetly romantic Excellent job! |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
Pixie-Babe03, Thanks a million, times two . I'm glad you enjoyed.Suga_Baby, Thanks! Seems like that's all I am anymore...he ruined me  , or saved me which ever.~Susie "Do you love me because I am beautiful, or am I beautiful because you love me?" ~Cinderella |
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