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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
I don't really like this too much but I figured I'd post it anyway. I think everyone goes through this so I guess in that sense we can appreciate it. It sure hurts when we fall but it definitely wakes us up. Enjoy.  You never even apologized For leading me to the edge of the cliff You never even tried to stop me When I jumped off of it, but I'm glad you didn't When I fell from the clouds I finally touched ground And walked out of the shivers Walked out of the tears Walked out of the obsession Walked out of the cold Walked out of your hands [This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (edited 12-27-2000).] |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Yep, sure does wake ya up...too bad we gotta even jump in the first place. Anywayz, loved the poem!! Keep writing!! ~Carly |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Great poem, sometimes we need to hit reality and "walk" things off. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
I loved this one! relationships where you are not grounded are very hard, because you have to come down sometime and it really hurts. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
We have all fallen off of edges like this. You describe the feelings very well. Thanks for posting! "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
How true your words are...relationships can often end for the best. Well done, I enjoyed! *Krista Knutson* I'm a slow dying flower In a frost-killing hour The sweet turning sour and untouchable... -Natalie Merchant |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Wow!!! This was GREAT! I'm really impressed. I like the concept and the style. Good jobBel |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Absolutely Beautiful... you are right, we all know how this feels... eventually we all feel this at some stage in our lives!! GREAT post!! Melz!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Thanks a lot you guys. I really appreciate it. Live and let live. ~*SeLf PrOcLaImEd FrEaK oF nAtUrE*~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was great. So tru....and im glad you posted this.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I'm glad you decided to post this too cause it's really good. I don't understand why you personally don't like it. The clarity of thoughts in this one is perfect. thanks  I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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