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Haiku Challenge |
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niceguy Member
since 2000-11-13
Posts 113Sapello, NM, USA |
Here's another Haiku. I am not very good at these. Tell me what you think. You entered my life. Broke through all my barriers. You've unlocked my heart. "Don't take love for granted...once it's gone, it hurts." |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
The thing I love about haiku poems is that they're short and straight to the point. You did great with this one. Or at least that's what I think. I forget the rules of haiku so I don't know about that part. But I do know that I like it.  < !signature-->Live and let live. ~*SeLf PrOcLaImEd FrEaK oF nAtUrE*~ [This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (edited 12-27-2000).] |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
This is a good one. I think it blows mine right out of the water Jon |
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niceguy Member
since 2000-11-13
Posts 113Sapello, NM, USA |
Hey, thanx a lot for the replies. This is the second Haiku that I've ever written and I wasn't too sure how it would turn out. Glad that you liked it. Thanx again. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hi. I really liked this one!! It says sooo much about yourself and the one who broke these barriers. Great job!! ~Carly |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Yeah, I just love these, good job on it "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
you have expressed a lot within few words... hence i think you have succeeded |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
niceguy~ This is so good. Im glad that alot of people are attempting to write these. They are so fun to do. But wasnt it you who replied to a haiku of mine with a haiku??? People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts. |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
great work... love it!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was a nice one......good job niceguy.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
perfect  I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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niceguy Member
since 2000-11-13
Posts 113Sapello, NM, USA |
Thanx for all the replies everyone, I am glad that you all liked it and that I seem to have done an okay job with the challenge. Thanx again "Don't take love for granted...once it's gone, it hurts." |
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Tears of Glass Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 182Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure |
I've just recently gotten into the whole Haiku craze, and I must say I love them! They are straight to the point, but beautiful at the same time. Bravo on this one! Awesome job... *Jennifer |
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