Teen Poetry #3 |
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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
Here's a different side of me for everyone to critique. A little on the dark side. Enjoy. I feel to old to be my age All this pain in rage Bottled inside me But only I can set myself free All windows and doors are locked I am a slave of the clock Time is never on my side As anguish comes in chilling tides Love used to surround me Now all that is around me Is betrayal and hate It is now too late Sadness follows me like a gloomy cloud Pain has become my shroud As I walk through the darkest night I no longer look for light I just stumble my way along As everything goes wrong Can you see into my eyes Do you comprehend all that lies Inside my mind, my heart, my soul You will never know I am all yu do not want to be You fear the rage inside of me Come and play my little game Lose your soul, lose your name Hello, I'm inside your head Yet you listen, you should be dead Goodbye little, puny man You are but a pawn in my hand TAP2 "Jac Pierre" |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
I must say this is a darker side of you, but I like it! It is just as expressive as the other side I envy so much! Keep up the beautiful writing!! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~ ~*~Love is the product of our dicontentment with ourselves~*~ ~*~SMILE! It makes your butt shine!~*~ |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
Tom, when did you write that one..I'm not sure if I'd read it...although I do know all about your darker side. It pains me to know of that kind of depression inside of you. Jeremy "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
I am also sorry that you feel so depressed, but we all feel like this sometimes, especally as teens. I just hope these feelings don't last and that writing this helped the pain a little. "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
yes i am so very sorry to see that you feel like this as from what i read of you. you don't seem to be this way. this is more my style. i hope to see more though because its just as good as the rest. enjoyed it much keep it up. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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