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Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S

0 posted 2000-07-01 03:26 AM


  I've been deprived a childhood
  I've been deprived love
So if i can't have what others have
       Or have had
Then I'm already dead to this world
       So dead i shall be...


I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


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Jeremy Halstead
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since 2000-06-01
Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A
1 posted 2000-07-01 03:29 AM


Hey man, just read my signature...it's the best and truest thing I could ever tell you.
By the way...every good person and person who feels deprived of love love's you.

Jeremy

"Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade."

Ethan Halo
Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793
on the roof again
2 posted 2000-07-01 03:37 AM


striking words put forth in simplicity. very excellent. and let me tell ya, some people wanna forget their childhoods, and i for one, wish i'd never fallen in love. it is better to count your blessings, rather than your damnations.

We are the Middle Children of History.
We have no Great Depression;no Great War.
Our Great War is a spiritual one. Our Great Depression is our lives

Erin
Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
3 posted 2000-07-01 02:28 PM


jeremiah...you know that i love reading your work...but not when you talk about things like this...its a good poem and all...but you shouldnt talk like that...

~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~

TAP2
Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211
Morris, Il USA
4 posted 2000-07-01 03:04 PM


Jeremiah,
Nothing wrong with a little expression through dark poetry. But let's keep it on paper. You seem like a very talented poet (your work reflects it). So don't leave us waiting too long.
TAP2

sorrowfulangel
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since 2000-06-29
Posts 59
Memphis,TN
5 posted 2000-07-01 03:11 PM


it's a good thing to be able to express yourself through words....even if those thoughts are dark
Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
6 posted 2000-07-01 04:26 PM


thanks for your replies and just to let you know this is not as dark as it sounds i'm not thinking about killing myself or anything like that and never will. the way i meant it was to say that i will be forgotten in my own way and live outside of life on my own if i'm to be treated different by life.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


jennie may*
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since 2000-06-17
Posts 122

7 posted 2000-07-01 08:50 PM


I like it-- in a certain perspective these words ring true...no matter how dark they may be.
StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
8 posted 2000-07-01 11:42 PM


Well Jeremiah, you're points sometimes may seem cynical, but they are the truth and deserve lots of applause! You always say what others are afraid to get out in the open! I want you to know that I am always here if you wanna talk! I know what it's like to feel the way you do! well, keep your head up ~ Time in it's own essence can heal even the most devastated hearts. Love Always~*~Jessica~*~

p.s. you never did e-mail me!!


~*~Love is the product of our dicontentment with ourselves~*~
~*~SMILE! It makes your butt shine!~*~

Chel
Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA
9 posted 2000-07-01 11:44 PM


The poem was very strong.  Expression is good and I am glad that you can express it with words that flow together so well.  It may be dark, but it's not wrong.  

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front"

LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697

10 posted 2000-07-02 12:11 PM


Jeremiah, this is so sad. I didn't have a peachy childhood either, but I haven't given up on myself. You shouldn't, either. I just want to you know that everyone here loves you.

"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
"The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea

Isabel Galaxia
Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733

11 posted 2000-07-02 10:50 PM


That was short but good and to the point.  Things will get better!!  Keep it up
Bel

Nikkisweet
Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 183
Tx, Dallas
12 posted 2000-07-02 11:00 PM


Very good poem, I like the way you make them so short and simple...right to the point.  And I'm expecting your e-mail..  

Within you I lose myself.
Without you I find myself wanting to become lost again.
-unkown-

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
13 posted 2007-12-01 06:53 PM


Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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