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Haikus (Lake's Challenge) |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair 
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Fountains of beauty < !signature-->Reflect our faces so clear Such as a mirror Mountains don't make sense Up close they seem much bigger Far off they are small Ever trace a stem Back to it's petals of green? It's a scene to see Hmm, I guess theyre okay. This is not my style though! Jeremy D. Raulinaitis 10/27/00 12am "A writer doesn't acquire a vacancy of mind, but rather a inadequacy of words." - Jeremy D. Raulinaitis [This message has been edited by jeremydraul (edited 12-27-2000).] |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
These are good. Haikus are generally written about nature as you have done here. Great job of meeting the challenge. IsGona "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Well if they're not your style ... you've done them beautifully regardless Jeremy! It's always great to try out some new styles for variety, and you've done a wonderful job here!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey. These were really great!! I loved the way they fit together, and the words were used so well. ~Carly |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Nature is one of my favorite things in life for many reasons so reading these was a delight. You've written it all so well. Live and let live. ~*SeLf PrOcLaImEd FrEaK oF nAtUrE*~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I liked the first two more than the third, but they are all good. These are wonderful images you've shared, thanks for taking the challenge! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
you have obivously put a lot of thought into your haikus...i enjoyed the refreshing perspectives which you have offered... write on! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Good haiku's......keep it up!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
seems like everyone's trying these haikus and senryus...good job  I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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