My loss(Lakewalker's challenge-haiku)

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keoni
Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC

0 posted 2000-12-26 04:44 PM

I think this works, if not OH WELL!

Leaving me today
Shed tears in a broken heart
Depression claims me

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine

Tears of Glass
Member

since 2000-12-04

Posts 182
Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure

1 posted 2000-12-26 04:54 PM

Wow... Great Haiku! I love it! Simple and sweet. Just the kind I like

Great job.

*Jennifer

Dark Enchantress
Senior Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 1258
meet Morgana

2 posted 2000-12-26 05:27 PM

Wonderful poem

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In order to be good one must know evil.

~*SeLf PrOcLaImEd FrEaK oF nAtUrE*~

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Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

3 posted 2000-12-26 08:54 PM

you wanna teach me to write a haiku?nice....i hope the depression doesnt claim you....

...email if u wanna talk about it....
Regina

Erin
Member Elite

since 2000-06-15

Posts 2527
~Chicago~

4 posted 2000-12-27 01:52 AM

Jon~
Great job!!! For a first it is really good. Keep it up I wanna see more of these out of you!!!

People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts.

Lakewalker
Member Elite

since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

5 posted 2000-12-27 03:04 PM

This worked very well, I like it. I also hope you write more of these! nice job

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

6 posted 2000-12-28 12:02 PM

i really like this...simply written but very heartfelt...i too add my applause and hope that you will write more such stuff...

sweetstuff101
Member

since 2000-07-27

Posts 375
OK, USA

7 posted 2000-12-28 12:08 PM

that was awesome!! I can't write haikus...well maybe I could if I tryed...but it wouldn't be good!!

I like your haiku
It was really really good
So uumm keep writing??

So how was that for something I just made up off the top of my head??? Now you see why I don't write these...oh well!! Great job, keep writing!!!

Luv,
~*~sweetstuff~*~< !signature-->

~*~GoOd fRiEnDz ArE hArD 2 FiNd, HaRdEr 2 LeAvE, & iMpOsSiBlE 2 fOrGeT~*~tHe HaRdEsT tHiNg tO Do iS wAtCh tHe 1 U LuV, lUv sUm1 eLsE~*~

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Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

8 posted 2000-12-29 04:29 PM

Good one keoni!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

9 posted 2000-12-30 02:36 PM

i like it, but i dont like what it has done to you. Hope you are doing better

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

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