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Expectations *short but sweet*
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Expectations *short but sweet* |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
*Expectations* Please don't expect more/ than what you see behind my eyes/ for they are merely doors/ to the depths of where my spirit lies/ and all that's in my heart/ is all that I know how to be/ so please don't search for more/ when all you'll find is me. ~*All that I have found in reason is reason just to not believe *~ ~*Things you see the way you see them will never be seen again*~ |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Definitely sweet! Keep on writing! |
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Snickers Member
since 2000-05-25
Posts 88East Haddam, CT |
I like this alot Kris!! It's short but it's ok because you got your point across very well. You can only be yourself, and no matter how hard other ppl may look within you, they're just gonna find out that you're you. You express yourself very well and I can totally relate. I'm glad you posted this! ~<3 Alwayz~ **Nikki** |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Wonderfully put! I love the way you say "please don't search for more when all you find is me" I feel that way all the time! Keep up the writing! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~   p.s. stay away from my husband Jeremy! J/K!!!!!!!!!!!!  "Love is the product of our discontentment with ourselves." "Bleeding hearts release tears of fire" "work like you don't need money, love like you've never been hurt,and live everyday as if it's your last" "Shoot for the moon, if you shall fall short, you always have the stars to fall upon" |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
 Kandi~ I hope you know that I am a smart ass and I'm just gonna givve you a hard time about it!! no hard feelings please! LoVe Ya!! LoVe AlWaYs~*~Jessica~*~ "Love is the product of our discontentment with ourselves." "Bleeding hearts release tears of fire" "work like you don't need money, love like you've never been hurt,and live everyday as if it's your last" "Shoot for the moon, if you shall fall short, you always have the stars to fall upon" |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
You were right, it is short. Like I've said before, some poerty is just meant to be like that or the point would be cluttered and faded. nice work chick. Jeremy D. Halstead "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
let me reaarange it a bit "Please don't expect more than what you see behind my eyes for they are merely doors to the depths of where my spirit lies and all that's in my heart is all that I know how to be so please don't search for more when all you'll find is me." WOW!!! it's is simple but the topic it talks about is huge. thanks for the read I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I like this poem, it's really good. Thanks for bumping this up acire  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nice one here....a wonderful read. *purrs*  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Right on. I really like that bit about your eyes being the doors to where your spirit is. Keep writing! ~*Skyfire *~Always Canadian*~ ~*~I used to be an idiot, but I'm all right now~*~ |
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DreamerGrl27 Member
since 2000-10-29
Posts 142 |
I really loved this a lot...it was really good. I know what you mean about people expecting more than you are, but what you are is always enough. |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
Wow...can't believe this one got bumped back up here...thanks everyone for replying ~ I appreciate it mucho! ~K~ ~*Won't you come and hold my hand? This world has taken me as far as it can... without your smile.~* ~*If I never said I'm sorry, then I'm wrong, |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Short but sweet was definately a great way to describe this...it was an amazing poem..i loved it... |
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