Teen Poetry #3 |
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Broken Home |
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Tears of Glass Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 182Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure |
Shattering, Through my window, Comes your harsh And angry words. The panes fall to peices, Loudly, but unheard. Pain rips Through my bedroom walls, Leaving its residue Where there had once been Helping comfort. Hatred grew quickly, And now my house in in shambles. It tore itself down. You've trampled my house, And my soul, To the ground. *Jennifer |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Great poem. Very good use of words. It's terrible having to live in a home that is plagued with fighting and hatred, I've been there. Good luck Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Child of the Stars![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey. There was something about this that...I don't know...sucked me in, brought me to that world.... ~Carly |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Great expression! I really like the way this poem is written, the words have a real meaning. nice job. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
I relate to this one well, and unfortunately, many people do. Hopefully you'll rebuild your own castle in the clouds. You'll find security therein. Wonderful poem. ![]() Live and let live. ~*SeLf PrOcLaImEd FrEaK oF nAtUrE*~ |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
Wow...that was really good!! I hope things all work out good for you. Just keep your head up! Great job on this poem! Keep writing!! Much Luv, ~*~SweetStuff~*~< !signature--> ~*~GoOd fRiEnDz ArE hArD 2 FiNd, HaRdEr 2 LeAvE, & iMpOsSiBlE 2 fOrGeT~*~tHe HaRdEsT tHiNg tO Do iS wAtCh tHe 1 U LuV, lUv sUm1 eLsE~*~ [This message has been edited by sweetstuff101 (edited 12-27-2000).] |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Sad poem.....get up tho.......pick your soul up and keep going. ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
very expressive. don't let this put you down though, stand up and move forward. that's what makes us better ![]() I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
nice details and form. I liked it a lot! ~JDR "A writer doesn't acquire a vacancy of mind, but rather a inadequacy of words." - Jeremy D. Raulinaitis |
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