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silvrduck Member
since 2000-11-05
Posts 146 |
curse you and your simple way cause it is my head with which you decide to play you’re changing me too going one by one and I’m scared to know you’ve only just begun. I know you love him well honey, I do too so don’t say such things cause I can’t hurt you don’t cry of jealousy it hurts me inside don’t say he wants me with you I wish to abide. no man to destroy us thought we knew that before maybe you forgot but I’m not the fool anymore I know what you’re doing testing me to see well friend, I’m hurting I thought you trusted me. < !signature--> *The hardest thing to do is watch the one you love, love somebody else.* [This message has been edited by silvrduck (edited 12-27-2000).] |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Very nice and I really liked the ending I know what you’re doing testing me to see well friend, I’m hurting I thought you trusted me. Jon |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Excellent poem and a very good ending.  Live and let live. ~*SeLf PrOcLaImEd FrEaK oF nAtUrE*~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Sounds like a tough situation, I hope things work out the way you want. Good job on the poem! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
This was a great poem. Not such a great way to feel, but you told your thoughts well...I wish you luck. ~Carly |
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tq_99 Junior Member
since 2000-11-14
Posts 45Las Vegas, NM, US |
This was a really good poem! I'm sorry that you are feeling this way, and I pray that you get through this situation and that everything will be ok. Great job of expressing yourself in this poem and I loved the ending. Keep up the good work. God Bless, - tq_99 "Some say a rich man has it all but if he has no friends he is nothing" |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Soiunds like your love life is a lil rocky right now..i hope things straighten out for you and things start to look up...very nice poem |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Good one here......i liked it a lot. Good luck with the love life.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
another example of pouring your heart out. This is, WOW!!! Yes, that's the word i need to describe it. Sorry, that you have to go thru this though. I love the poem. keep it up and good luck I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
wow, a lot of good lines here. I liked this one! ~JDR "A writer doesn't acquire a vacancy of mind, but rather a inadequacy of words." - Jeremy D. Raulinaitis |
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