Teen Poetry #3 |
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Kevin![]()
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa ![]() |
i have no direction I dont wish to walk You plead for correction every time you talk your eyes wound me silent i wish them to close disapointment is violent and constantly grows how can i appease you I cant heal my heart Theres no way to please you so how can I start you worry what pains be and I tell you no lies its the thing that restrains me its the look in your eyes |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
I cant heal my heart Theres no way to please you so how can I start Sounds like you are having some trouble. Its kinda hard to let you know what I think if you dont really explain whats going on. But keep on posting!!! People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts. |
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Child of the Stars![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Well this was a great poem..It's just hell when that look tells you you're not good enough..you gotta remember that you are. ~Carly |
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xShUgArHiGhx![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This was a great poem kevin...it had a lot of feelin in it and i get exactly what your trying to say...good job hun ![]() |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
That was a great poem! It was very emotinal, I can tell you speak from the heart. great job on this one!! Keep writing!! Luv, ~*~SweetStuff~*~ ~*~GoOd fRiEnDz ArE hArD 2 FiNd, HaRdEr 2 LeAvE, & iMpOsSiBlE 2 fOrGeT~*~tHe HaRdEsT tHiNg tO Do iS wAtCh tHe 1 U LuV, lUv sUm1 eLsE~*~ |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful expression Kevin, and an excellent flow to your words. Very nicely done! ![]() Best wishes, /Kit |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I like the way you have written this poem, it's a good one. Post some more for us kevin. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Dopey Dope![]()
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was a good one kevin.....hope to see more. Your words flow to well. ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Acies![]()
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
you expressed your feelings really well in this poem. I think this is the first of your that i've read and may i tell you that i'm totally impressed. keep em coming I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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DreamerGrl27 Member
since 2000-10-29
Posts 142 |
This was a really great poem...I dont really know exactly what you're trying to explain, but I can tell it's not something that good. I hope everything works out. |
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