Teen Poetry #3 |
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Picking Up My Life |
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Allysa![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden ![]() |
Stooping to pick up the pieces, of my sad forgotten life, I turn one into Struggle, and the other into Strife. Two pieces that have shattered, my simple heart and soul, two people, stuck together, making each other whole. Picking up the pieces, of my shattered years, filled with smiles, laughter and tears. Picking up the pieces, I wish I could forget, all the dangerous places, I wish I never met. Walking down the street, cars with tinted windows, teenage boys on bikes, knives hidden in their clothes. Wishing I could just turn back, to the Friday before that day, to save on single life, that was taken away. To save us all a shedded tear, and one less goodbye, to save us all from pain and fear, and from wondering why. Picking up the pieces, but not opening up to say, that my life would definatly be different, if it hadn't been for that one day. --------------------------------------------------- Just a simple poem. Happy Holidays! ![]() I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be great, to put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not so bad, it's not so bad. |
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Allysa![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
okay, fine then, no one writes back. Happy Holidays! ![]() |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
I like this. Is this about someone you know? Jon |
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Child of the Stars![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey, this was really great. Brought this shadow of darkness over the computer..hmm... anyways, keep writing. ~Carly |
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Tears of Glass Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 182Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure |
This poem was beautiful. While I was reading it almost brought tears to my eyes. You are very talented. I am so glad you are now picking up the pieces, and seems as though you are moving on. Very beautiful work. I love it. *Jennifer |
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Allysa![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Thanks you all! I am picking up pieces, but will never be whole, never heal. bye now~ I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be great, to put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not so bad, it's not so bad. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This poem is very good, nice job on it, I love the flow. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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xShUgArHiGhx![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Oy...if only we could turn back time huh? God i cant even list all of the things that i would change, prevent, and take back...jeez if only that was possibly i think i'd be the happiest person in the world...but thats only a wish not a reality unfortunately...great poem hun |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
hhhmm....I don't know how many times I have wanted to turn back time...oh well...hehe! Well I luved ur poem!! It was awesome!! Great job on this one..it flows well!! Keep writing!!! Much Luv, ~*~SweetStuff~*~< !signature--> ~*~GoOd fRiEnDz ArE hArD 2 FiNd, HaRdEr 2 LeAvE, & iMpOsSiBlE 2 fOrGeT~*~tHe HaRdEsT tHiNg tO Do iS wAtCh tHe 1 U LuV, lUv sUm1 eLsE~*~ [This message has been edited by sweetstuff101 (edited 12-28-2000).] |
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Acies![]()
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Allysa -- you crack me up...seems like you bumped your poem 17 inutes after you wrote it ![]() One of your most beautiful poems i've ever read. I just searched for your poems and i guess i've missed a lot, well i have time to read em...not all of em, but some...thanks for the read..by the way, how's nitsuj I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Dopey Dope![]()
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Good one here.....i think what acire pointed out was funny too.....I realized it before i read his post....hehe...funny. ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Elizabeth![]() ![]()
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
One day can change your whole life around...I know how it is to want to change that. This is very well done, Allysa. |
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Allysa![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Lakewalker: thanks much! Shugar: I would only want to change one thing. I would make sure that the court system not screw up and it would prevent three deaths. Thanks for replying! sweetstuff: thanks much! acire and Dopey: Don't think I don't have a reason for that now, ya hear me? Okay, I got on the computer once over break, posted two poems. Then I had to leave, and I wanted to make sure that the people could read my poems, plus I wanted to put them in my library and so I posted a message almost exactly twenty minutes later. thanks you guys! Elizabeth: Thanks so much for reading and replying! ![]() I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be great, to put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not so bad, it's not so bad. |
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Neokrew Member
since 2000-12-24
Posts 60VA |
Nice poem I really like thet flow great job! --Neo |
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Allysa![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Neo, thanks~ |
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Greeneyes617 Member
since 2000-11-22
Posts 329Arkansas |
Nice poem. I really liked it. |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
nice poem ...good expression I cant wait to read more! ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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DancinQueen![]()
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
great poem i really liked it ![]() ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Allysa![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
thanks y'all!!! You guys make me feel good about writing poems! I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be great, to put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not so bad, it's not so bad. |
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Allysa![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
~*BUMP*~ ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be great, to put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not so bad, it's not so bad. |
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HiddenSparklez Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 190British Columbia, Canada |
I thought it was great! Anything written from the heart and soul is so powerful just like this poem! |
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GirlsBestFriend Member
since 2000-12-27
Posts 71Planet Earth |
u know what to do with life Allysa. everyday brings something new and we gotta go on no matter what. maybe I should write this a poem too, should I? ![]() ![]() o nice poetry lots of luv "Isn't it funny how to the world you are nothing? But then to one person..you're the world" |
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Allan Riverwood![]() ![]()
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
This poem almost makes me feel like I am reading a mystery... you are good at communicating feelings of despair and sorrow. Good luck picking up the pieces. |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
I like this! ood job!! ![]() |
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Allysa![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
thank you all!!! thanks!!! I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be great, to put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not so bad, it's not so bad. |
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Acies![]()
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
seems like a lot of people love your poem ![]() I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Author Unknown Member
since 2001-01-05
Posts 57Linn MO USA |
very heartfelt, pretty intense, loved it |
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Allysa![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Acire: I feel LOVED!!!!!!!!!! (Smiles and hugs self) LOL! Author Unknown: Thanks much! BYE! I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be great, to put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not so bad, it's not so bad. |
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Acies![]()
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
you know all of us love you in here ![]() ~*gives Allysa a hug to make Justin jealous*~ he he he I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Allysa![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
acire, you crack me up!!! ![]() I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be great, to put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not so bad, it's not so bad. |
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