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niceguy Member
since 2000-11-13
Posts 113Sapello, NM, USA |
I never really wrote anything like this before but I thought I'd give it a try. Tell me what you think Lake. Broken My heart has shattered And your resonsible girl So just dissapear "Don't take love for granted...once it's gone, it hurts." |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
whats lakewalker's challenge?haikus? good jog better than I could ever do. REgina |
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niceguy Member
since 2000-11-13
Posts 113Sapello, NM, USA |
Yeah...it's posted in teen explorer, go and check it out if you get a chance. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Other than the minor typo of leaving the p out of responsible, this poem is awesome. I really like it, you should write some more of these! You definitely met my challenge  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
You did very well with this poem, niceguy. I agree with them you should do more. Live and let live. ~*SeLf PrOcLaImEd FrEaK oF nAtUrE*~ |
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niceguy Member
since 2000-11-13
Posts 113Sapello, NM, USA |
Hey, glad you liked it. Oops...guess I should type a little more slow huh? Thanx. |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I'm not really all into Haiku's or however you spell it but i really liked this one...great job! |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Everyone has really taken to these haikus... and everyone is doing a great job... this is no exception!! Keep up the great work!! Melz!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
i have to say this was well written too...short but haunting, it left me wondering about the fate of the speaker... encore!!  |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was a nice one niceguy.....keep it up!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
i heard haikus have rules, but forget the rule..you did well  I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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niceguy Member
since 2000-11-13
Posts 113Sapello, NM, USA |
Thanx so much for all of your replies. They really mean a lot to me. Thanx again. "Don't take love for granted...once it's gone, it hurts." |
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