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tq_99 Junior Member
since 2000-11-14
Posts 45Las Vegas, NM, US |
~GOING HOME~ No more tears, Please stop breaking mirrors. You know you’re mad, Please remember that you’re also sad. Everything’s turning black, It feels like there is something in my back. There’s blood all over the towel, I’m really getting scared now. I know you didn’t mean to, It happened because of all the emotions within you. I forgive you do not worry, It happened in the midst of your fury. We both know I am dying, That is why we are crying. Just please tell my family how, I’m going to see my savior now. "Some say a rich man has it all but if he has no friends he is nothing" |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Great poem - I love the words, It is soo sad though... I hope you feel better now that you have written it... Melz  Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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Lucius Cade Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 235Saskatchewan |
Very strong words. With such a sad ending. At the same time I liked reading it, well done. Lucidity is the answer to all problems |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Very strong emotions in this piece tq_99 and it does border on our guidelines of violence due to it's rather graphic nature. It is difficult to distinguish if you are speaking metaphorically, so unless I receive a concern from other members, I will not remove the post. If this is reflecting a metaphorical situation relatively true to life, I urge you to speak with an adult, a teacher, a councellor or clergy to help this person's anger get under control. No one deserves to be the subject of someone's anger or abuse. Please contact me directly by e-mail if you have any questions or wish to talk further. Take care ... Best wishes, /Kit |
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tq_99 Junior Member
since 2000-11-14
Posts 45Las Vegas, NM, US |
My apologies everybody, and my aplogies to you Kit because I did not know the guidelines. I wrote this piece about a month ago or so, it was about a dream that I had because of a story that I had just read. And at the time, I felt like writing, so I wrote about my dream. I am in no way feeling depressed or anything like that, I am probably the happiest I have ever been right now. Thank you all for the concern. In the future, I will not post such graphic poems. My apologies. God Bless, tq_99 "Some say a rich man has it all but if he has no friends he is nothing" |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey, this was pretty crazy. That's why I loved it. I love crazy things....Well eneh weh! I can't wait to read lots and lots more from you. ~Carly WhY ShOuLd I Be hypnotized by someone else's lies WhY ShOuLd I Take time and pride in what someone else believes... |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Hey, Great job on this one, I think it's really good! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Walkin' the line........hehe  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Your poem is just plain great....I have no words to describe how i really feel about it. But I'm loving it a lot. If that should give you a clue. Thanks for the read I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
You told me mine was great but back up here i almost missed this one holy good poem here bud. i mean its so good, but it seems how can u forgive someone when they stab you in the back? well thanks for sharing im adding this to my favorites. "i just love when you bring your whole crew because its just a bigger piece of cake for me to chew threw" |
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