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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada 
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I dont have a title(hint) and steam is blowing out of my cute little ears........lol. This is for Brad I love you so much. even though u can be as stubborn as a mule.With my whol heart forever.I really need imput!!!i dont know if i will give it to him.... Regina Broken heart,broken girl you were in my mind as the All-American dream boy nice hair,no problems, calm eyes. Most of all kind words and comforting advce But that soon chaged, you told me everything about the real you and the dream boy soon disappeared You fell in love with me that first night we talked, I didnt. I thought you were crazy, I still think you are for actually loving someone like me,it makes me cry. Im afraid of you, Im terrified if I told you the whole truth about me you would walk away, Im afraid that you really dont love me and I fell for you, you cant leave me alone in this horrible life I love you, I really dont think you know how much I do, so ill tell the whole world just how much I love you You have always been there for me wether I want you to or not, wether it was 1 in the morning or 3 in the afternoon I want you to know everything,you think you know everything about me, I want to tell you everything and I will once I can deal with the pain you are so addicting like candy but in a good way Deciding to change my life so you dont have to worry about me anymore When we talk I feel complete wether we are arguing,lecturing me on my life or just being goof balls and when we dont I feel lost and lonely, the tears roll down my cheeks Can I give you my heart?promise me u wont break it, Ill try not to break yours All I want is to be your darling angel and all I want from you is to keep on loving me and never stop. Im standing here stripped of my defenses, showing you the real me, knowing no matter how hard life gets I need you here in the flesh,to hold me and keep me safe and warm, take away my pain and the i can love you even more I love you Brad with all my heart and soul and that will never change only get stronger Regina |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey. It was a wonderful piece, full of bleeding emotion. I'm not good with advice or anything, but good luck with him and everything else life gives to ya. ~Carly WhY ShOuLd I Be hypnotized by someone else's lies WhY ShOuLd I Take time and pride in what someone else believes... |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
wow~ i gotta give it to you. it takes alot of strength to confess your love and like you said..strip yourself of your defenses just to let someone know the depth of your feelings for them. im not sure i could do it...great job. keep it up *dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Advice - I am the advice queen... ok well maybe not - but I always try to help!! You love him - so tell him how you feel... but first tell him about the "real" you... that way if you are scared about him not loving you for who you really are, then if he does decide that he doesn't like it, then you haven't bleed your heart to him and had it thrown back in your face... I doubt he will though, from what you have said here I think he loves you and you are lucky to have this! If he does say he doesn't love you for who you really are then he doesn't really love you for love overcomes everything!! I wish you luck, I hope that you aren't hurt in the same ways I have been as I know how much it hurts... Melz!! P.S. Great Poem - you have said everything soo well!! I know exactly how you feel though - I was there once before! It will all work out for you I am sure!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
give him the poem and tell him the whole truth! the poem is awesome. good luck with it all!! katherine |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was great and i surely thinkt that you should give this to him if you'd like for him to know everything about you and how you truly feel. This was great regi.......good one.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Just from reading your poem it sounds like he has shared everything with you and is always there for you, so I'm sure he would want to know everything about you. So my suggestion is you share with him. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
this has to be the sweetest poem Ive ever read, good luck jeremy r "A writer doesn't acquire a vacancy of mind, but rather a inadequacy of words." - Jeremy D. Raulinaitis |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I guess everyone is gonna tell you the same advice, and that's "go tell him how you feel"....And do so, do give him this poem. This poem will bring the truth out in him. At least that's what i think. good luck I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Okay, this might be long, so I'll appologize first for the length. Alright well...it's a good poem. You've certainly said a lot in it. Now I'm gonna apply a little of it to my life, for an example. There's probably 100+ things my boyfriend doesn't know about me, does he know he doesn't know them? Probably not. There was one certain thing tho, that was quite important and very painful, that he did not exactly know about, that I was going through then, and am still now(incase you want to know it applies to my 1st few poems...ack!). Well, somehow eventually, after not letting anybody know, I told him. It felt great to get it over with, but I hadn't expected what it would do to him. In the end though, I think it made things better.....there I'm done with my long boring story. I just meant all of that as an example of what could happen if/when you tell him all the stuff. He seems like he'd understand...I'll shut up now, so good luck, and show him the poem.. Bel |
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