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peanogrl83 Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202 |
Horrid. Abosolutely horrid. Vreni Vreni Insecure blob, magnificently wrong, Too young to die, yet lived too long. Chrome-coated sheets cover deadened ideals, Scald those with perception, those who feel. Heavenly gazing towards stars which burn Reflections only of my refusal to learn. Ashes of conscience scatter to pieces, Bear memory’s lies, future releases. Dismembered steps to a blessed hell, A rue-stained soul is ripped from its shell. Dangling laughter from puppets of glory, Fictitious conspiracies weave their story. Candy-coat attention swallowed as pills, Twisted inhibitions it eventually kills. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Vreni. Amazing. WhY ShOuLd I Be hypnotized with someone else's lies WhY ShOuLd I Take time and pride in what someone else believes... |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
i think u used the wrong words. Magnifiecent and beautiful and powerful experssion style and flow Regina |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Vreni Wonderful being, utterly great Too young to die, still lives straight. Silver sheets with hearty ideals Those who know her know what's real. Heavenly gazing towards stars so bright Reflections of Vreni show insight. Ashes of mind scatter the world Bear in mind she's living a swurl. Steps with cracks, still trod on through A rue-stained soul, yet so not true. Tingling laughter with smiling glory A love of love wills her story. Candy coated vreni, and still she thrills My love for you, no inhibition kills.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I'll be sure to remember your name so when you get famous, I could say that u actually emailed me  Raw talent -- that is what you have. Your poems have all these emotions that not even one in total despair would be inspired to right such things. Your imagination far reaches past the horizons.I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Yeah, this is totally not horrid, but that's just my opinion. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
ummm, yeah, great work, different... but I love different and I love this!! Melz!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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