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Hallie_Angel Member
since 2000-12-06
Posts 102 |
In looking back I realize The first time is a measure I'll use to weigh my memories That tomorrow I will treasure. First kiss, first date, first phone call, First one to hold my hand First time to feel the kind of love I hardly understand. Yet after carefull viewing If it wont hold up too light I'll have another "First time" To try and get it right. By: Me, and my friend Sara Corbin!!! FYI, We take turns writing verses like I wrote the first and the third and she wrote the middle one! |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
I can hardly tell any difference in the verses. You have very similar styles. Keep up the good work! |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
I liked this one, it's nice. I agree that you and your friend have very similar styles. Jon |
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Hallie_Angel Member
since 2000-12-06
Posts 102 |
Hey guy's, Thank you very much! Sara and I have been friend's online for awile and when I told her I liked poetry she said she did to and in a chatroom we just started writing back and forth. I couldn't take credit for it all, after all it is her too!  Read my other poem too. That one took a while, but we both managed to get it out. Our topic was the good's and bad's of Love! Once again thank you!!!Catherine!!! |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
you mix together well... both have great lines of wisdom and rhyme.. jeremy r "...if you've never met me, then you've no right to judge me. I have a good heart, but this heart can get ugly." ~DMX~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Good poem. Maybe sara should just join Passions eh? Hope to see her soon!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
good poem |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
hey cat, nice poem! my me and you should write a poem when you get back from Wisconsin. see ya in January! I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be great, to put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not so bad, it's not so bad. |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
It always good to share your writing, with others, and collaborate sometimes. This is a very good peice.xoxo Jenn "A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ?? |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
It always good to share your writing, with others, and collaborate sometimes. This is a very good peice.xoxo Jenn "A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ?? |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
this was great....i can kinda tell the different styles, but slightly.... this was very nice.... Salma |
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Hallie_Angel Member
since 2000-12-06
Posts 102 |
Thanks yall!!! Oh yeah and Sara doesn't need to join passions I think it would be better if she just stayed where she is and me where I am, she is on a diff poetry website anyways. Allysa brought me here and I don't think I should bring foriegn pplz here! Buh-Bye for now!!! Catherine!!! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I like this one too, you two did a very good job of collaborating to make this poem. It's great  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
You are a great writer, you and Sara... it is amazing how you can do that... Great work!! Melz!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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