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The letter I'll never send
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The letter I'll never send |
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Hallie_Angel Member
since 2000-12-06
Posts 102 |
The letter I'll never send Would calmly ask you why You broke my heart in two And told my love good-bye If I ever sent this letter It would sweetly state You tangled up your destiny And interrupted fate. The letter I will not write Will casually inquire How can you live without me? I was your one desire. If you recieved this letter It would politly say You need me in your life now You can't go on this way. The letter I'll never send Would then be briskly signed Your one and only love You know? The onw you left behind! FYI I wrote the third and last verse, Sara wrote the rest! |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Very well done, Catherine and Sara. It's hard to understand why relationships end. The sadness was well expressed...good job. |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Another really good one. I can relate because I have actually wrote and sent a letter similar to this. Very nice job. Jon |
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Hallie_Angel Member
since 2000-12-06
Posts 102 |
Thank you both much!!!  Read my other peom too!!! Catherine!!! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
i really liked this one a lot. Good job on this one!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
i think this is the first time i've read a poem written by you. I like it a lot, and I see now that i almost past something good. Next time i see your post, i'm sure to read it I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
GREAT POEM!!! I AM NOT KIDDING YOU WRITE SO GREAT. CAN I ASK YOU TO PLZ POST MORE. I WOULD ENJOY READING A LOT MORE!!! "i just love when you bring your whole crew because its just a bigger piece of cake for me to chew threw" |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
I loved this poem. I like the last stanza the best keep up the good work, IsGona "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Hallie_Angel Member
since 2000-12-06
Posts 102 |
Thanks yall!!! Merry Christmas!!! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Great job on this, I like poems where people write them together. Keep posting for us please "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Great Poem, you have done really well in adding to this poem... great work!! Melz!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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