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Hallie_Angel Member
since 2000-12-06
Posts 102 |
Were you there the day the music died? Did you want to hold me when I cried? Did you fight to stand there by my side When I was in despair Did you keep me safe within your arms? Did you protect me from all harm? Or did you win me over with your charm, running fingers through my hair? Did you simply see your chance To get what you wanted with one dance? You saw me hurting with one glance And decided to fool my heart. And like a fool I went along. When we danced I sang the songs. I thought I could be wrong, So I gladly played my part. And now I lie here wondering why I ever thought you and I Could fall in love and never cry Again for what we've done. I'm terrified of the way I feel Now that I know your love isn't real. I'm not sure my heart will ever heal, Because all I can do is run. I run from the future, but mostly the past Through the fields and the forests, so very fast. Through the moonlight that midnight has cast Onto my crying face. I've prayed tht you would decide to stay, That I could keep you one more day, And that you wouldn't turn away And leave me in this place. But I"ve fooled myself for much too long, That our love was not a tragic song. And I assume you will be gone, No time left to borrow. I'll try to smile when you say good-bye And wait untill your gone to cry. You'll be strong and so will I Although I feel such sorrow. And so I'll face this world alone, cold as ice ,and hard as stone, Untill true love comes along. I've nothing left to fear. But when our love has long been dead, When we've moved to the long road ahead, And I'm lying awake in bed, Your memory will be here! |
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Hallie_Angel Member
since 2000-12-06
Posts 102 |
FYI This is by Sara Corbin and Me! (Sara is my friend!) I'm posting again wha hoooo!!!! |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Love can be a painful thing, can't it? Powerful work here, I enjoyed it!  *Krista Knutson* I'm a slow dying flower In a frost-killing hour The sweet turning sour and untouchable... -Natalie Merchant |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nice to see you posting again. This was, yet another great one.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Hallie_Angel Member
since 2000-12-06
Posts 102 |
Thanks yalls!!!!!!!!!! Catherine!!! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Yet again I have to tell you I like the poem, please tell Sara that we like them! I liked the flow of this and the rhyme scheme was cool. What poetry site is sara at? "I run from the future, but mostly the past Through the fields and the forests, so very fast." "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Love hurts. BFF!!! LYLAS!! Call me when you get home, even at midnight!!! Allysa I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be great, to put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not so bad, it's not so bad. |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
"And so I'll face this world alone, cold as ice ,and hard as stone, Untill true love comes along. I've nothing left to fear." By far the best stanza, this really hit me hard. Great job you two! jeremy r "A writer doesn't acquire a vacancy of mind, but rather a inadequacy of words." - Jeremy D. Raulinaitis |
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Hallie_Angel Member
since 2000-12-06
Posts 102 |
Thanks yall's!!! Um's Allysa I will call you! Catherine!!! |
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silvrduck Member
since 2000-11-05
Posts 146 |
Wonderful poem!! I really loved the way this one flows.. great job! keep it up Sarah *The hardest thing to do is watch the one you love, love somebody else.* |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Memories of lost love, sometimes good, often bad... but once all remembered, make us sad that it is gone... although there can be exceptions to this, but i know it is for me!! Hope all improves for you!! Melz!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
oh dang!!! This poem has made me feel mad and sad at the same time. Too much emotions in this one. I have one question...What did u mean at the start of the poem? Are you trying to say that basically he tried to get with ya when you were hurting for someone else, when you were at a vulnerable stage. If that's what you are saying, this guy is a low life...don't even sweat him. Taking advantage of someone in that stage is not good. that's whats making me mad right now  Back to your poem...amazing!!!! keep postingI see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Misty Blue Junior Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 44 |
That was real deep. I felt it, Stay Tru. |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Okay, I'll admit it, I almost cried. Good poem. Really made me think about some stuff I had been avoiding... thanks! ~*Skyfire *~Always Canadian*~ ~*~I used to be an idiot, but I'm all right now~*~ |
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Hallie_Angel Member
since 2000-12-06
Posts 102 |
Hey yall, Just to let you know, I don't think I'm in the situations I write about most of the time, I enterpret for other people who might be in that situation. I thank you all for your responces and comments. I hope you all have a nice day and enjoy the holidays! Catherine! |
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